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12/22/2006 c1 Sure of Sun
Absolutely, without a doubt, the sweetest, cleverest poem I've read in a long time. Magnificent. And I do rather like that your last line doesn't rhyme; it contrasts directly with what the line says. It doesn't fit, but it says it does! :)
7/8/2006 c1 Miss. Paradox
I like it but, the last line didnt flow to well with the rest of it.
6/20/2006 c1 12Rachel M. T
This made me laugh. It also reminded me of a poem I wrote once. It was really good, except that you broke the rhyming at the end! Good job!
4/22/2006 c1 BicGirl
It's great. :) I love it. This poem was really original, and a fresh change from the poorly written poetry I usually read.
4/18/2006 c1 145dfgsfdghftgt44
Very nice. The only thing is that at the end, you broke the rhyme. Other than that, this was really cool. I liked it and it shows that you value your words so much!

~Cirien Phoenix of the Eternal Phlame

P.S. Thank you for the review on "Aubade of Taurus."
4/11/2006 c1 9helium lost
Your wordplay is great; the poem really portrays how poets and writers can find inspiration in the littlest things of life. But I think your lines "I'd been dropping writing at home and at school!" and "Now it's all where it should be." don't fit because the tone is different than the rest of the poem, and the rhythm, as well. Also, I think it should be "five bucks", not "five buck". Other than that, great poem; definitely adding it to my favorites :P

- hl
3/30/2006 c1 65Aquafied
interestingintermixed and lack of different words to say, a poet's poetic.

and i dont know, i dont have much time to finish the book and i havent had a considerable amount of writers block lately to continue it anyhow.so maybe, i might.
3/28/2006 c1 26My New Pen Name
Different. . . I really like it, I like how it expresses the inspiration people find in the strangest, most unexpected things. . .Nice one!
3/28/2006 c1 291behind the velvet curtain
That was cute. Very easy to identify with, and well put. Great, simple poem.

Keep writing

And thank you for your review.
3/28/2006 c1 27Hax Rook
right on. thoughtful take on common grounds of language and creativity. panoramic effect playful. repetition is worked to death here - could use more varied forms/expression. fresh and beamy.
3/28/2006 c1 4run rabbit run
noice! i like the cuteness of it and the oddness of it. makes me smile. cheers you got a nice talent there. -rabbit
3/27/2006 c1 219Matthew James Current
Awesome. I love original, creative poetry. This is both. Great idea, and nice follow through. This poem made me smile. Thanks for the review, feel free to stop by my site anytime and let me know if you need any constructive criticism or a review of a piece.
3/27/2006 c1 13Sir Scott
I'm glad you got your unfinished pose back.SirScott
3/27/2006 c1 7Boots of Press
haha cute and cleververy good imagery-Press
3/27/2006 c1 7Paradigm's Lament
I thought this was very creative, flowed nicely and it's just really a perfect poem. Great work!

-Paradigm's Lament
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