4/3/2006 c3 FlamingDragon7
Interesting plot. Question: Have you already chosen whose going to be with Ethan
Interesting plot. Question: Have you already chosen whose going to be with Ethan
4/3/2006 c3 Amina L. Forest
So, I realize I already sent a review, but everyone else got an early start to the voting, I just HAD to.
KEEP KATHERINE! I know, I know, this probably won't happen due to popular demand. She is protrayed as spoilt and mean by someone's character, and now everyones judging her that way. I know I always see the very best in people (that's how I am) but there must be a reason for her behavior. I know I wouldv'e said Katherine's comment in the car (jokingly, but still) anyways, I feel there's more to her then meets the eye and I really hope she can stay so I can see that.
Plus it just wouldn't be fun if they all got along. :)
My favorite is Nicole. Keep her.
I also want Misty to stay, because there also seems more to her then meets the eye. Her comp;liments to EVERYONE show that she'll probably backstab someone sooner or later. Again, returning to the point that it's not fun if everyone gets along.
I also like that she doesn't think of Ethan as a thing. She's on this game to get away from her dad. I sense an interesting subplot there.
Oh, if you do decide to keep Katherine, keep Danielle too.
Sorry if the Katherine paragraph offended. Im not, I just had lots of ideas to get out there.
Keep dreaming. Keep creating. Keep writing.
Amina L. Forest
So, I realize I already sent a review, but everyone else got an early start to the voting, I just HAD to.
KEEP KATHERINE! I know, I know, this probably won't happen due to popular demand. She is protrayed as spoilt and mean by someone's character, and now everyones judging her that way. I know I always see the very best in people (that's how I am) but there must be a reason for her behavior. I know I wouldv'e said Katherine's comment in the car (jokingly, but still) anyways, I feel there's more to her then meets the eye and I really hope she can stay so I can see that.
Plus it just wouldn't be fun if they all got along. :)
My favorite is Nicole. Keep her.
I also want Misty to stay, because there also seems more to her then meets the eye. Her comp;liments to EVERYONE show that she'll probably backstab someone sooner or later. Again, returning to the point that it's not fun if everyone gets along.
I also like that she doesn't think of Ethan as a thing. She's on this game to get away from her dad. I sense an interesting subplot there.
Oh, if you do decide to keep Katherine, keep Danielle too.
Sorry if the Katherine paragraph offended. Im not, I just had lots of ideas to get out there.
Keep dreaming. Keep creating. Keep writing.
Amina L. Forest
4/3/2006 c3 5The Green Crow
Wow! You've done a wonderful job with managing all the characters. All of them seem real, even if you can't remember them all once you're done. Congrats!
When we're voting, do we vote for our favorite, or least favorite. Or do we choose? Can we vote for more then one (either way?)
This is wonderful, and write more soon. Only, dont forget about Across Time and Oceans. I really like that story too. :)
Wow! You've done a wonderful job with managing all the characters. All of them seem real, even if you can't remember them all once you're done. Congrats!
When we're voting, do we vote for our favorite, or least favorite. Or do we choose? Can we vote for more then one (either way?)
This is wonderful, and write more soon. Only, dont forget about Across Time and Oceans. I really like that story too. :)
4/3/2006 c3 mipster
HI!
So I came across your story and I love how you used the reality T.V cliche, but added yor own unique twist to it. I love how Ethan was black mailed into it and his speech. It is really fun and creative. I like how this is set up so that we can vote too, but introducing 20 characters at a time and using their own perspective all at the same time is kinda overwhelming to the reader. I went and printed your list of contestants just so that I could follow along. I'm not saying it was poorly written or anything like that at all, because it was a fabulous chapter and story as a whole. I just wanted to point this out to you. If you want my opinon on who he should pick yo leave I'll tell you
1. Kathrine - please please get rid of her she is obviously a gold digger and rude too. I want her GONE.
2. Danielle - she's okay, but she's sucha rich girl, who, as she made it clear, wants to win and thinks of him as her prize. Somehow I doubt Ethan wants someone like that.
3. Emily - that whole bragging thing got on my nerves. She is really shallow and snobby. I don't like her.
These are my top picks. The ones I really want to leave. There are some other shallow girls I would love to see gone, but they did nothing to get my attention as to why they should leave. Below are some suggests of other girls I want to leave, but don't mind if they stay.
Lyda - I hate to say it because she seems so nice, but the models are always the one's who end up winning these shows. You know. I just couldn't bear it if another one won, but I do still like her so if you wish to keep her in that's fine.
Misty - she seems nice and all, but a little star struck. She's doing this to escape from her father and country live, to feel like a star. I think Ethan needs someone more real.
The following are girls I LOVE and want to stay
My absoulte most favorite canadite is: NICOLE - I love how she's not really here a particular reason, and isn't all about winning the duke. I loved how she described her love of nature and wants to wander around more than she wants to spend time with him. She just came off really good and real to me.
I also like Kelly and Jessie. I love how Kelly is sarcastic and doesn't like getting her life on a sechudule. I like that about her. I like Jessie because she seems so down to earth and really sincere.
One girl who I'm not really sure about is Alexandra. I loved her thoughts and her dress problems and not wanting to wear one. Right from the begining when I was reading the profiles of the characters I was like - that's the one. She is just like him and loves history like him. The only thing I didn't like was how she said she was doing this to gain opportunities. This makes feel like she is using him. I think she wants to get to his library. All in all I still like her, only I feel wary of her. I want her to stay so I can find out what she's her for.
Well that's my thoughts I hope this helps on how you decide to eliminate
~mip*
HI!
So I came across your story and I love how you used the reality T.V cliche, but added yor own unique twist to it. I love how Ethan was black mailed into it and his speech. It is really fun and creative. I like how this is set up so that we can vote too, but introducing 20 characters at a time and using their own perspective all at the same time is kinda overwhelming to the reader. I went and printed your list of contestants just so that I could follow along. I'm not saying it was poorly written or anything like that at all, because it was a fabulous chapter and story as a whole. I just wanted to point this out to you. If you want my opinon on who he should pick yo leave I'll tell you
1. Kathrine - please please get rid of her she is obviously a gold digger and rude too. I want her GONE.
2. Danielle - she's okay, but she's sucha rich girl, who, as she made it clear, wants to win and thinks of him as her prize. Somehow I doubt Ethan wants someone like that.
3. Emily - that whole bragging thing got on my nerves. She is really shallow and snobby. I don't like her.
These are my top picks. The ones I really want to leave. There are some other shallow girls I would love to see gone, but they did nothing to get my attention as to why they should leave. Below are some suggests of other girls I want to leave, but don't mind if they stay.
Lyda - I hate to say it because she seems so nice, but the models are always the one's who end up winning these shows. You know. I just couldn't bear it if another one won, but I do still like her so if you wish to keep her in that's fine.
Misty - she seems nice and all, but a little star struck. She's doing this to escape from her father and country live, to feel like a star. I think Ethan needs someone more real.
The following are girls I LOVE and want to stay
My absoulte most favorite canadite is: NICOLE - I love how she's not really here a particular reason, and isn't all about winning the duke. I loved how she described her love of nature and wants to wander around more than she wants to spend time with him. She just came off really good and real to me.
I also like Kelly and Jessie. I love how Kelly is sarcastic and doesn't like getting her life on a sechudule. I like that about her. I like Jessie because she seems so down to earth and really sincere.
One girl who I'm not really sure about is Alexandra. I loved her thoughts and her dress problems and not wanting to wear one. Right from the begining when I was reading the profiles of the characters I was like - that's the one. She is just like him and loves history like him. The only thing I didn't like was how she said she was doing this to gain opportunities. This makes feel like she is using him. I think she wants to get to his library. All in all I still like her, only I feel wary of her. I want her to stay so I can find out what she's her for.
Well that's my thoughts I hope this helps on how you decide to eliminate
~mip*
4/3/2006 c3 5anamika
Go Ethan finally the guy comes back into his own did i mention i'm in lvoe with him hehehe...as for the girls: Sarah,Lyda, Alexandra, Natalie,Nicole Brianna, ,Dale and kindly chuck cara jenna danielle emily pamela and Katherine the rest i'm not to keen on...till next week...
Go Ethan finally the guy comes back into his own did i mention i'm in lvoe with him hehehe...as for the girls: Sarah,Lyda, Alexandra, Natalie,Nicole Brianna, ,Dale and kindly chuck cara jenna danielle emily pamela and Katherine the rest i'm not to keen on...till next week...
4/3/2006 c3 2Pundit
I'm still voting for Alexandra (and will the ENTIRE story, unless you give her the boot early on) because 1. she sounds like a female version of Ethan in some ways and 2. I'm totally betting on her trying to get on the show so she can have access to Ehtan's library. In this way, she and Ethan have the SAME motive for participating in a degrading, dehumanizing project with virtually no legitimate excuse for its existence. Plus, she sounds funny in her short blurb. Update soon!
-Jiro
I'm still voting for Alexandra (and will the ENTIRE story, unless you give her the boot early on) because 1. she sounds like a female version of Ethan in some ways and 2. I'm totally betting on her trying to get on the show so she can have access to Ehtan's library. In this way, she and Ethan have the SAME motive for participating in a degrading, dehumanizing project with virtually no legitimate excuse for its existence. Plus, she sounds funny in her short blurb. Update soon!
-Jiro
4/2/2006 c3 11les petits bateaux
Woah...this chapter was filled with introduction, and I like that. I really don't know what to think of these girls, but I thought Lyda's and Emily's parts were pretty hilarious. It was cute, and it didn't mean that Emily had to go just because she was being that. I didn't like Katherine though...typical, no? Looking forward to the dancing. Probably that will give us a closer look. :D
Woah...this chapter was filled with introduction, and I like that. I really don't know what to think of these girls, but I thought Lyda's and Emily's parts were pretty hilarious. It was cute, and it didn't mean that Emily had to go just because she was being that. I didn't like Katherine though...typical, no? Looking forward to the dancing. Probably that will give us a closer look. :D
4/2/2006 c3 1starvednsl33py
okay please please please take out misty, katherine, and danielle. =/ you didn't have a lot of pamela, the last girl.
=) i really liked alexandra haha
okay please please please take out misty, katherine, and danielle. =/ you didn't have a lot of pamela, the last girl.
=) i really liked alexandra haha
4/2/2006 c3 1redgoose
There were so many characters that I had to take out my pad to write down the ones I liked! =)
Of course I liked Ethan. He's seems like a pretty cool guy.
If I were to pick the contestants for Ethan, they'll be...
-Jessie-Kelly-Natalie (I really liked her.)-Nicole-Alexandra-Danielle
Update soon.
There were so many characters that I had to take out my pad to write down the ones I liked! =)
Of course I liked Ethan. He's seems like a pretty cool guy.
If I were to pick the contestants for Ethan, they'll be...
-Jessie-Kelly-Natalie (I really liked her.)-Nicole-Alexandra-Danielle
Update soon.
4/2/2006 c3 Alisha
ok...wo...ack...cough...stare. I got really confused with all the girls that I couldn't really figure them out. Great start to a story though, i HEART it.And damn right...British accents are SEXY!
ok...wo...ack...cough...stare. I got really confused with all the girls that I couldn't really figure them out. Great start to a story though, i HEART it.And damn right...British accents are SEXY!
4/2/2006 c3 9milenaa
hey there. i really liked this chapter. it already gives me an idea on who to vote off. anyways good work!
hey there. i really liked this chapter. it already gives me an idea on who to vote off. anyways good work!
4/2/2006 c3 P.M
I love the British accent, too! Oh, I hope Jessie stays and wins! I still got to remember who is who from the last chapter. oh well. Keep up the good job! Bye.
I love the British accent, too! Oh, I hope Jessie stays and wins! I still got to remember who is who from the last chapter. oh well. Keep up the good job! Bye.
4/2/2006 c3 1maskedcat
Wow, every time I read one of your stories I'm just blown away by your talent. Seriously, I think you are one of the most (if not the most) talented writer on this site. Besides an amzing imagination you have this incredibly natural tone and way of writing. I'm really just so impressed by you.
Oh yeah, and I don't like Katherine- she should go (no duh).
Wow, every time I read one of your stories I'm just blown away by your talent. Seriously, I think you are one of the most (if not the most) talented writer on this site. Besides an amzing imagination you have this incredibly natural tone and way of writing. I'm really just so impressed by you.
Oh yeah, and I don't like Katherine- she should go (no duh).