for Now, My Sweet4/9/2006 c1 
95Ellin Louise
I love this, it's just great. Firstly I love the way this reads, the lines are sharp and stand alone. I love the consistancy, the three lined verses, with the last line always longer than the first two.
There are some amazing lines in there, "You're naked just for show""Make sure you do it slow" are among my favourites of the poem, although they sound better when read with the rest.
Great job on this, adding it to my favs list, I'll have to read some of your other stuff here.
95Ellin LouiseI love this, it's just great. Firstly I love the way this reads, the lines are sharp and stand alone. I love the consistancy, the three lined verses, with the last line always longer than the first two.
There are some amazing lines in there, "You're naked just for show""Make sure you do it slow" are among my favourites of the poem, although they sound better when read with the rest.
Great job on this, adding it to my favs list, I'll have to read some of your other stuff here.
3/21/2006 c1 D. Rochelle
I love this poem, esp. the 3rd & 4th stanzas. Powerful imagery. I have nothing to critique. Favorited, and keep writing!
I love this poem, esp. the 3rd & 4th stanzas. Powerful imagery. I have nothing to critique. Favorited, and keep writing!
3/21/2006 c1 59Sacred-Phoenix-Nephthys
Hey..this was rea;;y good..sounds like sumthin i would write, lol..neways..shoret but awesum...kep it up^_^ Review me sumtime^_^
59Sacred-Phoenix-NephthysHey..this was rea;;y good..sounds like sumthin i would write, lol..neways..shoret but awesum...kep it up^_^ Review me sumtime^_^