for Kiwi Strawberry10/8/2006 c1 
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I luv stories with friends who are completely oposite !
Hmm wouldn't micro mini controdict itself ? I mean mini skirts are already short ,so if they were micro that means they would be like non existent , right ? Lol ,sorry couldn't help but think of that .
Lol I love how you use Lolita's name . I read your profile and saw you love japan ,hich therefore means you like japanese culture & trends ( as do I ) so I totaly get Lotlita's name !
Can't wait to get to the real story !
Please R&R my story Frog's ,Warts & Kisses !
Write on .
Confuzzld Me
2M.R.SannerI luv stories with friends who are completely oposite !
Hmm wouldn't micro mini controdict itself ? I mean mini skirts are already short ,so if they were micro that means they would be like non existent , right ? Lol ,sorry couldn't help but think of that .
Lol I love how you use Lolita's name . I read your profile and saw you love japan ,hich therefore means you like japanese culture & trends ( as do I ) so I totaly get Lotlita's name !
Can't wait to get to the real story !
Please R&R my story Frog's ,Warts & Kisses !
Write on .
Confuzzld Me
8/17/2006 c2 Jugglingbearperformer
I'm sorta confused on who the main character is, like who is speaking the whole time in this chappie? Also, I don't like how you have to have every girls reaction, you know, its almost as if your trying even out the characters, but its not working. Other than that I really like it, so please update!
I'm sorta confused on who the main character is, like who is speaking the whole time in this chappie? Also, I don't like how you have to have every girls reaction, you know, its almost as if your trying even out the characters, but its not working. Other than that I really like it, so please update!
7/13/2006 c2 2Dust Cloud
The dialogue is kind of wooden. If they're such friends, wouldn't they know the color of their eyes already without needing to discuss them? I do like the valley girl thing, though. ^_^
And the girls seem just a little Mary-Sue-ish. Pretty and amazing, you know?
AH! FRUITS BASKET! Great, great anime. Only...it's Kyo...not Kyoun, last I checked. Cat boy, I mean.
Let me guess. Kyoun is a cat demon or something of the sort.
I think I've given my share of criticism, right? So, what I like is the writing style. You give good descriptions without being overly wordy.
Well, I'm done!
~IP~
2Dust CloudThe dialogue is kind of wooden. If they're such friends, wouldn't they know the color of their eyes already without needing to discuss them? I do like the valley girl thing, though. ^_^
And the girls seem just a little Mary-Sue-ish. Pretty and amazing, you know?
AH! FRUITS BASKET! Great, great anime. Only...it's Kyo...not Kyoun, last I checked. Cat boy, I mean.
Let me guess. Kyoun is a cat demon or something of the sort.
I think I've given my share of criticism, right? So, what I like is the writing style. You give good descriptions without being overly wordy.
Well, I'm done!
~IP~
7/13/2006 c1 Dust Cloud
Good start. I wish a little bit more had been explained about the characters, but i liked the clothing descriptions.
Good start. I wish a little bit more had been explained about the characters, but i liked the clothing descriptions.
5/7/2006 c2 1hope for rent
PNGz0rs! MY character's name is Neko! ... Did you copy me? ... No, wait, you did this before me. ^^; Ignore the above bit.
-yells- Not updating every Friday! Anywho, I like this story. I think I need more. Update soon!
1hope for rentPNGz0rs! MY character's name is Neko! ... Did you copy me? ... No, wait, you did this before me. ^^; Ignore the above bit.
-yells- Not updating every Friday! Anywho, I like this story. I think I need more. Update soon!