for Clown3/21/2012 c1 
11Kiyoko H
I really enjoyed the idea of this story, as I happen to be terrified of clowns. I liked the intense detail, but you took it away at key points in the dialogue that could've added a lot of suspense. There were a few grammatical issues, but we all make those sometimes. I loved how you used fragmented sentences for emphasis and the look of the entire document is pleasing to the eye. The spaced paragraphs make it easier to read and more chilling.
11Kiyoko HI really enjoyed the idea of this story, as I happen to be terrified of clowns. I liked the intense detail, but you took it away at key points in the dialogue that could've added a lot of suspense. There were a few grammatical issues, but we all make those sometimes. I loved how you used fragmented sentences for emphasis and the look of the entire document is pleasing to the eye. The spaced paragraphs make it easier to read and more chilling.
8/12/2011 c1 6Pages of the Gnats
Holy crap. That story got me on my toes, and the thunder that was coming from the outside storm just added to the suspense. LOVE IT
6Pages of the GnatsHoly crap. That story got me on my toes, and the thunder that was coming from the outside storm just added to the suspense. LOVE IT
7/14/2011 c1 1RedNoble
wow that was scary.
i could see it all in my head i forgot i was reading until i got to the end and saw the 'review this story' bubble... which i knew i should since this was a masterpiece.
really well done ^-^
1RedNoblewow that was scary.
i could see it all in my head i forgot i was reading until i got to the end and saw the 'review this story' bubble... which i knew i should since this was a masterpiece.
really well done ^-^
6/29/2011 c1 4xxxCuriosity
o.o this was good! the ending was a surprise i kind of liked clowns before but now...haha i dont think imma go to the circus now
4xxxCuriosityo.o this was good! the ending was a surprise i kind of liked clowns before but now...haha i dont think imma go to the circus now
10/25/2006 c1 theonlygoogle
wow a great story i love the way you made it so the clown said killer things and she asked him again and she changed it
wow a great story i love the way you made it so the clown said killer things and she asked him again and she changed it
4/8/2006 c1 The Aborted God
Wow! This is such a creative story, and a nice break from all the "vampire" stories that people keep writing.
I espeacially liked how you built up fear and mixed it with madness, like the parts where the Main character thinks the clown is saying things that he is not.
Also, the ending was great, espeacially when you learn that there is no clown...
Wow! This is such a creative story, and a nice break from all the "vampire" stories that people keep writing.
I espeacially liked how you built up fear and mixed it with madness, like the parts where the Main character thinks the clown is saying things that he is not.
Also, the ending was great, espeacially when you learn that there is no clown...
3/29/2006 c1 45Kikaria
really creepy! i like it a lot. it wasnt just scary either, but it was also very well written! good job.~Kikaria
45Kikariareally creepy! i like it a lot. it wasnt just scary either, but it was also very well written! good job.~Kikaria
3/25/2006 c1 11Lovestruckandwhatnot
nice and creepy. i hate being in elevators with strangers... but clowns make it ten times worse.
11Lovestruckandwhatnotnice and creepy. i hate being in elevators with strangers... but clowns make it ten times worse.
3/23/2006 c1 2Sambo2612
God damn that was scary. If that happened to me in real life, id be really scared. Great job.
2Sambo2612God damn that was scary. If that happened to me in real life, id be really scared. Great job.
3/21/2006 c1 8Hayden the master of tales
That was awesome. It was so creepy yet clean. This is the kind of story you tell around campfires.
8Hayden the master of talesThat was awesome. It was so creepy yet clean. This is the kind of story you tell around campfires.
3/21/2006 c1 12Monev11235
Dude... that was crazy. I laughed so hard at the end with the parts where he kept sayig different things.
12Monev11235Dude... that was crazy. I laughed so hard at the end with the parts where he kept sayig different things.