for Stark4/27/2006 c1 
12deadlyperfection
"crimsion tears for dead denial"^^ awesome line - so vivid, even though I dont usually like that metaphore, you pulled it off very well.
"everything is so, so white / like a hospital's flourescent light"^^i loved the repeating of the word "so" it made it seem almost as though you were confused and trying to figure out what was going on. and i love how you relate it to a hospital and everything. it connects really well
kudos
12deadlyperfection"crimsion tears for dead denial"^^ awesome line - so vivid, even though I dont usually like that metaphore, you pulled it off very well.
"everything is so, so white / like a hospital's flourescent light"^^i loved the repeating of the word "so" it made it seem almost as though you were confused and trying to figure out what was going on. and i love how you relate it to a hospital and everything. it connects really well
kudos
3/29/2006 c1 18twistedtruths
I love this poem, it was really deep and beautifully written! You did a wonderful job with it.
Thank you so much for the review btw. It was really nice, it really made my night, seeing as the one I had been having. Anyway, thanks again!
Alys
18twistedtruthsI love this poem, it was really deep and beautifully written! You did a wonderful job with it.
Thank you so much for the review btw. It was really nice, it really made my night, seeing as the one I had been having. Anyway, thanks again!
Alys
3/26/2006 c1 298Moon-Chaser
What you write is so vivid and emotive. I can guess what happened through what you write and while I have never been that far, I have been close. I hope that you continue to write what you feel and find it as an outlet for your feelings.
Keep it up.
298Moon-ChaserWhat you write is so vivid and emotive. I can guess what happened through what you write and while I have never been that far, I have been close. I hope that you continue to write what you feel and find it as an outlet for your feelings.
Keep it up.
3/25/2006 c1 silentscreamer07
hey leila...*hugs* I don't know what's going on or anything, but i just send you lots of *hugs* because hugs help. So *HUGS* I love ya, and miss ya! Can't wait to see you in june! yayness!
Ne ways, about your poem, you still don't like in imagery and beautiful writing..(have i told you yet, that i envy you for that?)ne whos...you're first paragraph, described perfectly how i feel in hospitals..."It glare makes everything seem so cold, To maim your mind and kill your soul." I couldn't have said it better myself...
"My blood's too sharp against the tile/Crimson tears for dead denial"
wow...those lines gave me the creeps, but they were really awesome too..."too sharp" gave it better imagery there...
Also, you had the perfect ending to this poem, I really thought that last line proves it..."I'd see me-distraught, my heart laid bare."
Anways, Leila, beautiful poem, I love ya bunches, hope to talk to ya soon! You can always talk to me if you need to..otay? otay. *smiles* *HUGS* again...SEE YOU IN JUNE! YAYNESS!
~Britney~
hey leila...*hugs* I don't know what's going on or anything, but i just send you lots of *hugs* because hugs help. So *HUGS* I love ya, and miss ya! Can't wait to see you in june! yayness!
Ne ways, about your poem, you still don't like in imagery and beautiful writing..(have i told you yet, that i envy you for that?)ne whos...you're first paragraph, described perfectly how i feel in hospitals..."It glare makes everything seem so cold, To maim your mind and kill your soul." I couldn't have said it better myself...
"My blood's too sharp against the tile/Crimson tears for dead denial"
wow...those lines gave me the creeps, but they were really awesome too..."too sharp" gave it better imagery there...
Also, you had the perfect ending to this poem, I really thought that last line proves it..."I'd see me-distraught, my heart laid bare."
Anways, Leila, beautiful poem, I love ya bunches, hope to talk to ya soon! You can always talk to me if you need to..otay? otay. *smiles* *HUGS* again...SEE YOU IN JUNE! YAYNESS!
~Britney~
3/24/2006 c1 1Shiba-.-Sempai
"My blood's too sharp against the tile Crimson tears for dead denial."
Such entrancing works shouldn't be allowed to come from such hellish pain. It would make life and living so much simpler if ugly happenings made for ugly creations, and wondrous events birthed wondrous creations. Ah, well. The two lines above are the one I both adore and abhor the most. (Ambivalence!) They convey far too much hurt for them to ever be loved, and yet are so terribly, painfully beautiful that you find yourself being drawn to them again and again. *cyberhugs*
1Shiba-.-Sempai"My blood's too sharp against the tile Crimson tears for dead denial."
Such entrancing works shouldn't be allowed to come from such hellish pain. It would make life and living so much simpler if ugly happenings made for ugly creations, and wondrous events birthed wondrous creations. Ah, well. The two lines above are the one I both adore and abhor the most. (Ambivalence!) They convey far too much hurt for them to ever be loved, and yet are so terribly, painfully beautiful that you find yourself being drawn to them again and again. *cyberhugs*
3/24/2006 c1 62lifescrewsusall
"My blood's too sharp against the tileCrimson tears for dead denial" wow. and the ending. such intense agony. great work
62lifescrewsusall"My blood's too sharp against the tileCrimson tears for dead denial" wow. and the ending. such intense agony. great work