for CC Nebraska8/15/2006 c1 
8incognegro
I like the enjambent of this piece! :) I've never seen a structure like that before, but I really like it. I also like the repetition.
8incognegroI like the enjambent of this piece! :) I've never seen a structure like that before, but I really like it. I also like the repetition.
5/6/2006 c1 13Jecai
I love the diverse references and the allusion at the end. People don't always work, but they keep running.
13JecaiI love the diverse references and the allusion at the end. People don't always work, but they keep running.
4/6/2006 c1 145dfgsfdghftgt44
Whoa! This is so weird and the way you broke the lines up (*and the general way it is written*). I love it cause it's just so weird, but at the same time, it makes almost perfect sense. I love this! Amazing job!
~Cirien Phoenix
P.S. Thank you for the review of "Aubade of Taurus."
145dfgsfdghftgt44Whoa! This is so weird and the way you broke the lines up (*and the general way it is written*). I love it cause it's just so weird, but at the same time, it makes almost perfect sense. I love this! Amazing job!
~Cirien Phoenix
P.S. Thank you for the review of "Aubade of Taurus."
4/5/2006 c1 11Chemically Induced
nice creation of rushing emotions. i dont understand what is going on, exactly, but maybe it's irrelevant. it seems the feeling is what is important, and with that it dosn't lack. Watchtower Dark Eyes is a great line. great work. i like i like it. :)
love, c.induced.
11Chemically Inducednice creation of rushing emotions. i dont understand what is going on, exactly, but maybe it's irrelevant. it seems the feeling is what is important, and with that it dosn't lack. Watchtower Dark Eyes is a great line. great work. i like i like it. :)
love, c.induced.
4/2/2006 c1 26braindead1345
i kinda get it, your saying that you love her so much its like you dont know which way is up. theres raw energy in this
26braindead1345i kinda get it, your saying that you love her so much its like you dont know which way is up. theres raw energy in this
3/28/2006 c1 4Acting-Girly
whateveryouwant,
I liked the poem, though I found it a tad confusing. "Watchtower Dark Eyes" had to be my favorite line. One comment I'd make would be to sperate the sentences a little more so it's easier to read. I want to thnak you for reviewing my poem, it was about me so I'm not quite sure what the cliches were. Thanks all the same, and lovely poem.
~Elise
4Acting-Girlywhateveryouwant,
I liked the poem, though I found it a tad confusing. "Watchtower Dark Eyes" had to be my favorite line. One comment I'd make would be to sperate the sentences a little more so it's easier to read. I want to thnak you for reviewing my poem, it was about me so I'm not quite sure what the cliches were. Thanks all the same, and lovely poem.
~Elise
3/27/2006 c1 hey maria
"please, this deep/girl I can't barely stand...girl I love I love I love her..." Is this about wanting so much to love someone you don't?
I have a feeling I have no idea what I'm talking about. In any case, the repetition works well and the phrase "Watchtower Dark Eyes" is brilliant.
"please, this deep/girl I can't barely stand...girl I love I love I love her..." Is this about wanting so much to love someone you don't?
I have a feeling I have no idea what I'm talking about. In any case, the repetition works well and the phrase "Watchtower Dark Eyes" is brilliant.
3/27/2006 c1 27Hax Rook
fair s of c.. clear enough to wonder, opaque enough to wander. fond of the simple repetitions. almost too fragmented sometimes. pleasantly different - keep building.
27Hax Rookfair s of c.. clear enough to wonder, opaque enough to wander. fond of the simple repetitions. almost too fragmented sometimes. pleasantly different - keep building.
3/26/2006 c1 291behind the velvet curtain
I like the repetition and the breakup of the lines. It has a sort of rushed effect. Very nice.
And thank you for your review.
291behind the velvet curtainI like the repetition and the breakup of the lines. It has a sort of rushed effect. Very nice.
And thank you for your review.
3/26/2006 c1 144chaos called creation
The repetition and the choice of words creates such a longing in this. great job
144chaos called creationThe repetition and the choice of words creates such a longing in this. great job
3/26/2006 c1 13Manda Pantxike Sterling
nice poem. I've never read one like it. very unique writing style
13Manda Pantxike Sterlingnice poem. I've never read one like it. very unique writing style