for Unfortunately5/23/2006 c1 Caught By Myself
The thing I love most about this is it's structure, and how it affects the way a person reads it. The last sentence, the way you broke it down, is awesome. I could picture a heart actually slowing down as I read through that line... and then stopping at the end. Bravo!
The thing I love most about this is it's structure, and how it affects the way a person reads it. The last sentence, the way you broke it down, is awesome. I could picture a heart actually slowing down as I read through that line... and then stopping at the end. Bravo!
4/13/2006 c1 
59S0ulSearching
awsome! I love it...especially "C'mon, mess me upBefore I get away
I've been running forever,But you can't get that farOn a treadmill.And I can't do anything right.
"I love how I always relate to your stuff-it's good to know someone feels the same way I do ^_^-pammy- x3
59S0ulSearchingawsome! I love it...especially "C'mon, mess me upBefore I get away
I've been running forever,But you can't get that farOn a treadmill.And I can't do anything right.
"I love how I always relate to your stuff-it's good to know someone feels the same way I do ^_^-pammy- x3
4/10/2006 c1 63silentscreamer07
Hey Leila! First I want to apologize, because it has taken me so long to review you *tears* I'm sorry. I've been sort of busy, and I haven't really been checking up on FP as much. But! I'm here to review...so let me review you...:)
You wrote this poem wonderfully, as always you easily portrayed you're emotions in this poem, ones that were clearly painted for the reader to see. :( That is why I send you *hugs* and I hope you don't always feel this way. Just know that you do have some friends here for you okay? *raises hand* And I'm one, I'll always be here, and don't ever doubt that. I'm here, and I'll always make sure that I am. I never back out on a true friend. SO i'll never back out on you, okay? *Smiles* more *hugs*
"I've been running forever,But you can't get that farOn a treadmill.And I can't do anything right."
I feel like that too sometimes, feels like you just keep running and running or just trying and trying, but you can never get far enough, you always feel like you're in the same spot as you were to begin with.
The ending to this poem was perfect and it really gives the point of this whole poem, and just shows how you feel. I hope everything is okay for you. Just know I love ya and there's more people out there who love you too. *keep writing* and i miss and love you bunches!
I'LL SEE YOU SOON THOUGH! YAY! hehe, I'm so excited! Love ya! buhbyes
~bRiTnEy~
63silentscreamer07Hey Leila! First I want to apologize, because it has taken me so long to review you *tears* I'm sorry. I've been sort of busy, and I haven't really been checking up on FP as much. But! I'm here to review...so let me review you...:)
You wrote this poem wonderfully, as always you easily portrayed you're emotions in this poem, ones that were clearly painted for the reader to see. :( That is why I send you *hugs* and I hope you don't always feel this way. Just know that you do have some friends here for you okay? *raises hand* And I'm one, I'll always be here, and don't ever doubt that. I'm here, and I'll always make sure that I am. I never back out on a true friend. SO i'll never back out on you, okay? *Smiles* more *hugs*
"I've been running forever,But you can't get that farOn a treadmill.And I can't do anything right."
I feel like that too sometimes, feels like you just keep running and running or just trying and trying, but you can never get far enough, you always feel like you're in the same spot as you were to begin with.
The ending to this poem was perfect and it really gives the point of this whole poem, and just shows how you feel. I hope everything is okay for you. Just know I love ya and there's more people out there who love you too. *keep writing* and i miss and love you bunches!
I'LL SEE YOU SOON THOUGH! YAY! hehe, I'm so excited! Love ya! buhbyes
~bRiTnEy~
4/5/2006 c1 612simpleplan13
I like this.. especially the beginning part before the line and the last stanza.. nicely written
612simpleplan13I like this.. especially the beginning part before the line and the last stanza.. nicely written
3/29/2006 c1 18twistedtruths
Wow. Amazing, I feel like this all the time. It was nicely written, I love this peom. One of my favs. Keep up teh great work!
18twistedtruthsWow. Amazing, I feel like this all the time. It was nicely written, I love this peom. One of my favs. Keep up teh great work!
3/28/2006 c1 298Moon-Chaser
I love the way that you write your poems, the words that you use and the structure. The last two stanzas really brought it all togther.
Keep it up.
298Moon-ChaserI love the way that you write your poems, the words that you use and the structure. The last two stanzas really brought it all togther.
Keep it up.
3/27/2006 c1 127drblueface
The stanzas at the bottom, I loved. Personally, I think they can stand pretty strongly alone without the bit above the line about everything being the same.
I truly enjoy this piece, the shortening of the stanzas makes it feel quicker and quicker. Makes the heartbeat imagery even more effective! Keep up the great writing! ^_^
127drbluefaceThe stanzas at the bottom, I loved. Personally, I think they can stand pretty strongly alone without the bit above the line about everything being the same.
I truly enjoy this piece, the shortening of the stanzas makes it feel quicker and quicker. Makes the heartbeat imagery even more effective! Keep up the great writing! ^_^