for pretty plus pirouette7/31/2006 c1 
107ash the arsnist
firstly, i love how you took a ballerina as your subject (as they are generally depicted with such gracebeautypoise) && showed something so much more...raw... "that you could actually be as passionate enough / to actually bleed for something you love)" incredible lines that i think back to often in so many different situations, && in my opinion poetry that makes you do that is an achievement worth arrogance, amazing work
107ash the arsnistfirstly, i love how you took a ballerina as your subject (as they are generally depicted with such gracebeautypoise) && showed something so much more...raw... "that you could actually be as passionate enough / to actually bleed for something you love)" incredible lines that i think back to often in so many different situations, && in my opinion poetry that makes you do that is an achievement worth arrogance, amazing work
6/27/2006 c1 77by His blood
f u c k, how do you write such amazing, beautiful poetry? this has to be one of my favorites as well, so flawless, so raw and so beautiful, so jagged-edged (yet) perfect. there are some absolutely amazing lines in here that just take my breath away. the feeling just screams and that's what makes it so powerful. heart-wrenching. my favorite lines are: 'and you think it looks like blood/that you could actually be as passionate/to actually bleed for something you love.' perfection. 'best friend/is a memory carved onto this chain/that only makes you work harder trying to forget.' ohgod, that hits me so hard - the words carry with them so much pain and since i've felt so much of this already, it just makes this hit harder. 'when i carved those words into yours/you actually bled, and now a scar remains/(looks like the only things you are passionate about/are things you don't want).' ohgod, how do you write like this? expressed so beautifully and rawpainfully. god ... 'reach into your heart and feel the gashes and scrapes' - that was beautiful, the way you showed 'ashes' and 'rapes', pain within pain. '& remember/only love can heal you/(but you can't bleed for love)' a beautiful ending. god, i love this. your writing is amazing.
77by His bloodf u c k, how do you write such amazing, beautiful poetry? this has to be one of my favorites as well, so flawless, so raw and so beautiful, so jagged-edged (yet) perfect. there are some absolutely amazing lines in here that just take my breath away. the feeling just screams and that's what makes it so powerful. heart-wrenching. my favorite lines are: 'and you think it looks like blood/that you could actually be as passionate/to actually bleed for something you love.' perfection. 'best friend/is a memory carved onto this chain/that only makes you work harder trying to forget.' ohgod, that hits me so hard - the words carry with them so much pain and since i've felt so much of this already, it just makes this hit harder. 'when i carved those words into yours/you actually bled, and now a scar remains/(looks like the only things you are passionate about/are things you don't want).' ohgod, how do you write like this? expressed so beautifully and rawpainfully. god ... 'reach into your heart and feel the gashes and scrapes' - that was beautiful, the way you showed 'ashes' and 'rapes', pain within pain. '& remember/only love can heal you/(but you can't bleed for love)' a beautiful ending. god, i love this. your writing is amazing.
5/8/2006 c1 57water lily nymph
very twisted and so full of intrigue - how amazing to show the ugly side of something so well, great job. (looks like the only things you are passionate aboutare things that you don’t want) - awesome line. ~*
57water lily nymphvery twisted and so full of intrigue - how amazing to show the ugly side of something so well, great job. (looks like the only things you are passionate aboutare things that you don’t want) - awesome line. ~*
5/6/2006 c1 the naked civil servant
(the polish splinters at your pirouettes,
and you think it looks like blood/
that you could actually be as passionate enough
to actually bleed for something you love)
oh my good GOD... that & the last line... so bitter, accusatory, desperate, hopeful, gorgeous & sad. i may love you.
(the polish splinters at your pirouettes,
and you think it looks like blood/
that you could actually be as passionate enough
to actually bleed for something you love)
oh my good GOD... that & the last line... so bitter, accusatory, desperate, hopeful, gorgeous & sad. i may love you.
5/6/2006 c1 61Wingless Cherub
I love these cynical little messages. The end lines are always so powerful.
61Wingless CherubI love these cynical little messages. The end lines are always so powerful.
5/5/2006 c1 Queen of Absolutely Everything
it reminded me of all those stories about girls who have to push SO HARD to be ballerinas...poor babies. try living in a third world country where women can't do anything. anyways, i really loved this one. i think it's my favorite.
it reminded me of all those stories about girls who have to push SO HARD to be ballerinas...poor babies. try living in a third world country where women can't do anything. anyways, i really loved this one. i think it's my favorite.
4/25/2006 c1 11les petits bateaux
Wow wow wow. Simply gorgeous imagery, I can almost feel everything. Your ending was creative enough to amaze me. Beautiful.
11les petits bateauxWow wow wow. Simply gorgeous imagery, I can almost feel everything. Your ending was creative enough to amaze me. Beautiful.
4/24/2006 c1 79Spare Change
wow.
i like the ashes and rape part best.
fantastic work-you don't sacrifice vocabulary for visual/textual execution.
79Spare Changewow.
i like the ashes and rape part best.
fantastic work-you don't sacrifice vocabulary for visual/textual execution.
4/23/2006 c1 4strawberry memories
oh my god, that was AMAZING! what wonderfully strong and brightly colored images you snuck in between your words! wow! I loved the topic, and the way you were able to express your emotions without drawing an outline for your reader.
p.s. thank you for your review!
4strawberry memoriesoh my god, that was AMAZING! what wonderfully strong and brightly colored images you snuck in between your words! wow! I loved the topic, and the way you were able to express your emotions without drawing an outline for your reader.
p.s. thank you for your review!
4/6/2006 c1 13Nicole Michele
I love this, all around just loved it.
Great images you used, they burned themselves into my brain.
GREAT JOB.
13Nicole MicheleI love this, all around just loved it.
Great images you used, they burned themselves into my brain.
GREAT JOB.
4/2/2006 c1 a lonely september
ohmygod i love this so much. . . this is so pretty. i love the ballerina theme, and it's just so painful and beautiful all at the same time. i loveloveloveit.
ohmygod i love this so much. . . this is so pretty. i love the ballerina theme, and it's just so painful and beautiful all at the same time. i loveloveloveit.
3/29/2006 c1 60dollface and her cancer
Something about just the word ballerina brings to mind a twirling, fleeting image; adding to it, you've written a spiralling, ribboning poem here. "(the polish splinters at your pirouettes". Memorable, strong lines.
60dollface and her cancerSomething about just the word ballerina brings to mind a twirling, fleeting image; adding to it, you've written a spiralling, ribboning poem here. "(the polish splinters at your pirouettes". Memorable, strong lines.