for Verisimilitude4/18/2006 c1 
35Procrastinating Fairy
I think I love Alex's word too. I might just steal it myself! *writes it in sharpie all over her hand* Anyhow. Interesting how poetry is always a good form of venting.
Third stanza was amazing and definitely my favorite (particularly the last two lines of it; I'll never look at Valentines' Day candy the same way again) "Turn your conscience down" was also a nice line (you come up with some of the greatest!) and the poem itself was very... I don't really know what to describe it with. But it's something.
Only qualm is that the last two lines of the second stanza don't flow too well with me, but I'm probably just reading it wrong.
PF
35Procrastinating FairyI think I love Alex's word too. I might just steal it myself! *writes it in sharpie all over her hand* Anyhow. Interesting how poetry is always a good form of venting.
Third stanza was amazing and definitely my favorite (particularly the last two lines of it; I'll never look at Valentines' Day candy the same way again) "Turn your conscience down" was also a nice line (you come up with some of the greatest!) and the poem itself was very... I don't really know what to describe it with. But it's something.
Only qualm is that the last two lines of the second stanza don't flow too well with me, but I'm probably just reading it wrong.
PF
4/10/2006 c1 63silentscreamer07
Hello again. *smiles* I really loved this poem. You just wrote it so beautifully. I loved every line, I really don't think I could just pick a favorite. I think what you have a talent of doing in you're writing is that you just write it so beautifully, that sometimes you almost expect it to be just a sweet and happy poem, but then after you read it you're like..."Wait a minute, aww...that's sad." Or something of that sort. But you definitly have no problem of showing in you're poems what you're saying, which is why you're beautiful writing doenst take away from you're message.
Sometimes people worry too much, therefore they like to put their nose in places it shouldnt be. And it's annoying yes, trust me, I've been through things like that before. And it's hard to keep in mind that they care, because it really doesnt seem like that, expecially when it seems to be over every s i n g l e little thing. *AH!* It's annoying, yes, but they care, yes.
Ne ways, I loved some of you're metaphors/Imagery in this poem...specially the "And I'm used to the blinds being pulled over you're eyes." I send you *hugs* I miss you bunches o oats! And I really can't wait to see you! Time is going by soo stinkin slow! I wish it would hurry it up already! lol. ne ways. oh! and btw..thanks for putting wat Verisimilitude ment...Little brain and Big words don't go well together for me. lolol. :D Thanks again, and I loved this poem. *kw* Love you!
~Britnee~
63silentscreamer07Hello again. *smiles* I really loved this poem. You just wrote it so beautifully. I loved every line, I really don't think I could just pick a favorite. I think what you have a talent of doing in you're writing is that you just write it so beautifully, that sometimes you almost expect it to be just a sweet and happy poem, but then after you read it you're like..."Wait a minute, aww...that's sad." Or something of that sort. But you definitly have no problem of showing in you're poems what you're saying, which is why you're beautiful writing doenst take away from you're message.
Sometimes people worry too much, therefore they like to put their nose in places it shouldnt be. And it's annoying yes, trust me, I've been through things like that before. And it's hard to keep in mind that they care, because it really doesnt seem like that, expecially when it seems to be over every s i n g l e little thing. *AH!* It's annoying, yes, but they care, yes.
Ne ways, I loved some of you're metaphors/Imagery in this poem...specially the "And I'm used to the blinds being pulled over you're eyes." I send you *hugs* I miss you bunches o oats! And I really can't wait to see you! Time is going by soo stinkin slow! I wish it would hurry it up already! lol. ne ways. oh! and btw..thanks for putting wat Verisimilitude ment...Little brain and Big words don't go well together for me. lolol. :D Thanks again, and I loved this poem. *kw* Love you!
~Britnee~
4/1/2006 c1 141AllyCred
OMG...this is so wonderful, i love the way you take a theme and just make an absolutely brilliant poem out of it, this was amazing, especially loved the lines "But I'm just like that heart-shaped chocolate box- Pretty wrapping, but empty, while my inside rots" so vivid and i know exactly how this feels, well done, this is amazing, keep writing forever, coz i will never stop reading!
Lotsa Love ~AC~
141AllyCredOMG...this is so wonderful, i love the way you take a theme and just make an absolutely brilliant poem out of it, this was amazing, especially loved the lines "But I'm just like that heart-shaped chocolate box- Pretty wrapping, but empty, while my inside rots" so vivid and i know exactly how this feels, well done, this is amazing, keep writing forever, coz i will never stop reading!
Lotsa Love ~AC~
3/29/2006 c1 19Rhea Valente
Wow... i love this!
Especially: "Ashes and broken hearts mix so well"
That line is awesome, great imagery!
KW!
~wolfeh (11.00)
19Rhea ValenteWow... i love this!
Especially: "Ashes and broken hearts mix so well"
That line is awesome, great imagery!
KW!
~wolfeh (11.00)
3/28/2006 c1 298Moon-Chaser
Wow! This poem feels so powerful to me, I can relate really well to it.
Keep it up.
298Moon-ChaserWow! This poem feels so powerful to me, I can relate really well to it.
Keep it up.