for Swallow, Smile7/17/2008 c14 
2toujoursmoi
wickedly awesome story.wickedly unique.wicked ending.wicked plot struture and wicked how you showed and described the emotions.wickedly different to any other story ive read.you should make another long story like this cos ur awesome at it.keep up the great work!
Maria
2toujoursmoiwickedly awesome story.wickedly unique.wicked ending.wicked plot struture and wicked how you showed and described the emotions.wickedly different to any other story ive read.you should make another long story like this cos ur awesome at it.keep up the great work!
Maria
8/21/2006 c13 NowOrNever
But... noo! Haha, he better have a good reason...
And wow, I know about the whole junior thing. I started my junior year today and it was not fun at all... ugh. Longest day of my life.
Can't wait for more!
: )
But... noo! Haha, he better have a good reason...
And wow, I know about the whole junior thing. I started my junior year today and it was not fun at all... ugh. Longest day of my life.
Can't wait for more!
: )
8/17/2006 c12 5alone with my thoughts
...It's good I suppose... but extremely depressing and I see only bad to worse situation... Well written but start thinking about your plot a little more. Is anything going to be alright?
5alone with my thoughts...It's good I suppose... but extremely depressing and I see only bad to worse situation... Well written but start thinking about your plot a little more. Is anything going to be alright?
8/16/2006 c12 78myheartiswaypastbeating
I thought it was great has a very chilling quality that I love.
78myheartiswaypastbeatingI thought it was great has a very chilling quality that I love.
8/3/2006 c12 31Cindy Moon
Yay! New chapter. I hope I can count on you as one of those authors who actually UPDATE. What will happen next? You left us there on a cliffhanger.-Cindy Moon *)
31Cindy MoonYay! New chapter. I hope I can count on you as one of those authors who actually UPDATE. What will happen next? You left us there on a cliffhanger.-Cindy Moon *)
8/3/2006 c12 NowOrNever
Ooh my, Marie's certainly got herself into quite a situation now...
I absolutely adore the attitude you've given her. Being a model and famous, she must be used to getting what she wants, and going hungry would make her even snappier. It all feels very natural, which is always good.
Damien seems so very sweet, and I genuinely hope you keep him that way. I'm a little afraid he's going to turn out to be a jerk or something, although I can't quite see that, but I hope you don't have that happen.
I did see a surplus of typos in this chapter, but that can all be fixed easily enough so no worries.
Can't wait for more!
: )
Ooh my, Marie's certainly got herself into quite a situation now...
I absolutely adore the attitude you've given her. Being a model and famous, she must be used to getting what she wants, and going hungry would make her even snappier. It all feels very natural, which is always good.
Damien seems so very sweet, and I genuinely hope you keep him that way. I'm a little afraid he's going to turn out to be a jerk or something, although I can't quite see that, but I hope you don't have that happen.
I did see a surplus of typos in this chapter, but that can all be fixed easily enough so no worries.
Can't wait for more!
: )
7/24/2006 c11 5alone with my thoughts
This chapter was absolutley amazing. This is the most emotion I've seen poured into your stroy so far. LOLabout the drug references
5alone with my thoughtsThis chapter was absolutley amazing. This is the most emotion I've seen poured into your stroy so far. LOLabout the drug references
7/18/2006 c11 31Cindy Moon
I'm so glad I'm bored out of my mind and have nothing better to do. You know what scares me? Your style reminds me of my own. You're quite a competent writer. I love the chapter titles! (I Predict a Riot was one of my favorites- yay Kaiser Chiefs)Mr. Snook: definitely a fun character. I do hope you update soon. Keep up the good work. If you ever need a BETA reader...contact me. The grammar/spelling errors will drive me insane. all my love.
-Cindy Moon *)
31Cindy MoonI'm so glad I'm bored out of my mind and have nothing better to do. You know what scares me? Your style reminds me of my own. You're quite a competent writer. I love the chapter titles! (I Predict a Riot was one of my favorites- yay Kaiser Chiefs)Mr. Snook: definitely a fun character. I do hope you update soon. Keep up the good work. If you ever need a BETA reader...contact me. The grammar/spelling errors will drive me insane. all my love.
-Cindy Moon *)
7/18/2006 c11 NowOrNever
Hmm, I'm curious to see what happens when David finds out about Damien, or about her eating disorder. Oughta be some good drama coming up, lol...
One thing that I would change though, is I noticed that you had both the intern and Elliot use the word "zenith" and I just find that a little strange, that two people would use that uncommon of a word. Maybe it's just me though.
And yeah, I know how ya feel. My sweet sixteen was a disaster. Total letdown... lol.
Anyway, can't wait for more!
: )
Hmm, I'm curious to see what happens when David finds out about Damien, or about her eating disorder. Oughta be some good drama coming up, lol...
One thing that I would change though, is I noticed that you had both the intern and Elliot use the word "zenith" and I just find that a little strange, that two people would use that uncommon of a word. Maybe it's just me though.
And yeah, I know how ya feel. My sweet sixteen was a disaster. Total letdown... lol.
Anyway, can't wait for more!
: )
7/18/2006 c1 Cindy Moon
Excellent first chapter, considering you wrote this sometime earlier in the year. Your style exudes throughout the story; it's really you. Good allusions to pop culture! The detailing is good and the characters are plausible. Living vicariously my love?(this is your beloved tree by the way)
-Cindy Moon *)
Excellent first chapter, considering you wrote this sometime earlier in the year. Your style exudes throughout the story; it's really you. Good allusions to pop culture! The detailing is good and the characters are plausible. Living vicariously my love?(this is your beloved tree by the way)
-Cindy Moon *)
7/17/2006 c1 1LuluCypher
I really like this. I like how realistic the details are- it shows you've done your research. :) They really bring the story to life.
1LuluCypherI really like this. I like how realistic the details are- it shows you've done your research. :) They really bring the story to life.
7/17/2006 c11 6cramel07
hey! sorry i havent reviewed in so long...i like the way this chapter's heading. its making it seem marie is being sucked into a vortex, what with her 'drugs' and the re-inforcement from her modelling that the skinnier she is, the more jobs she gets. you kinda cringe knowing she's on the brink of falling apart because she's relying so heavily on two things - damian and her job - and they can both be taken away so easily. shes taking away her future (college) for her job and so setting herself up for a fall.i like it :Di'd also take a bet that its damian who goes first, and the publicity affects her career.good work!
6cramel07hey! sorry i havent reviewed in so long...i like the way this chapter's heading. its making it seem marie is being sucked into a vortex, what with her 'drugs' and the re-inforcement from her modelling that the skinnier she is, the more jobs she gets. you kinda cringe knowing she's on the brink of falling apart because she's relying so heavily on two things - damian and her job - and they can both be taken away so easily. shes taking away her future (college) for her job and so setting herself up for a fall.i like it :Di'd also take a bet that its damian who goes first, and the publicity affects her career.good work!
7/15/2006 c10 Kayte
wow, this is awesome! Update soon-kayte
wow, this is awesome! Update soon-kayte
6/30/2006 c10 NowOrNever
"What a sly fox I am. Even with a brother as a doctor, I have reached my goal. I am what they wanted.
A gorgeous doll that all the designers want to play dress up with."
Great line.
You've really got the emotions down perfectly. Amazing chapter.
: )
"What a sly fox I am. Even with a brother as a doctor, I have reached my goal. I am what they wanted.
A gorgeous doll that all the designers want to play dress up with."
Great line.
You've really got the emotions down perfectly. Amazing chapter.
: )