for Mistakes Like Us5/2/2006 c1 
1Changethesubject
and it was the first line that rendered me speechless.congratulations - you wrote this really well and exposed all the feeling in it. brilliant work/
1Changethesubjectand it was the first line that rendered me speechless.congratulations - you wrote this really well and exposed all the feeling in it. brilliant work/
4/28/2006 c1 64not sure yet
o, i love that beginning, it was enchanting and pulled me into the black hole of the rest of the poem, o so lovely, excellent job
64not sure yeto, i love that beginning, it was enchanting and pulled me into the black hole of the rest of the poem, o so lovely, excellent job
4/26/2006 c1 a lonely september
'we always thought our silver lining glittered like goldbut when it rains, the sky can tell beautiful lies' i really love that... that's awesome. and i also like the last stanza... it's incredible.
'we always thought our silver lining glittered like goldbut when it rains, the sky can tell beautiful lies' i really love that... that's awesome. and i also like the last stanza... it's incredible.
4/8/2006 c1 18bleed gilead
it's so regretful and such a torrent of fascinating ideas and imagery, but i think the second/last stanza is a bit overkill. i love the way you end the first stanza, the hourglass that "cut us down to size when the sand stopped falling." love the way you begin, love how you utilize cliches in a completely different way, providing insight and vivid emotion.
18bleed gileadit's so regretful and such a torrent of fascinating ideas and imagery, but i think the second/last stanza is a bit overkill. i love the way you end the first stanza, the hourglass that "cut us down to size when the sand stopped falling." love the way you begin, love how you utilize cliches in a completely different way, providing insight and vivid emotion.
4/8/2006 c1 11For Absent Friends
So many wonderful lines and images. It's truly amazing how you can create such lovely poetry from such painful events.
11For Absent FriendsSo many wonderful lines and images. It's truly amazing how you can create such lovely poetry from such painful events.