for Blind12/11/2007 c1 
31Mya von Dor
I like the imagery... the cruelty of blindness with the softness and beauty of herself... and the use of a cloth was cool, for some reason. You're really good at describing things, my personal downfall, and the ending is a nice... twist? Conclusion? Something like that... It's enough of a twist to make it cool but not completely mindblowing. You did a really good job of this, really :)
31Mya von DorI like the imagery... the cruelty of blindness with the softness and beauty of herself... and the use of a cloth was cool, for some reason. You're really good at describing things, my personal downfall, and the ending is a nice... twist? Conclusion? Something like that... It's enough of a twist to make it cool but not completely mindblowing. You did a really good job of this, really :)
10/1/2007 c1 24The FiboNACHI Sequence
*laughs*
Yeah. Love is blind...
I like the use of this metaphor. This is actually part of the reason I didn't post my character study on 'love'.
You have the monopoly on that. I'm not nearly skilled enough to write anything quite that deep.
As you can probably gather, I like this. As with everything. *laughs*
Ciao
Nach
24The FiboNACHI Sequence*laughs*
Yeah. Love is blind...
I like the use of this metaphor. This is actually part of the reason I didn't post my character study on 'love'.
You have the monopoly on that. I'm not nearly skilled enough to write anything quite that deep.
As you can probably gather, I like this. As with everything. *laughs*
Ciao
Nach
7/3/2007 c1 56Sanseui-kitty
once again i'm speechless. you're an amazing writer. I love the detail. you're so descriptive it's as if the reader is in the story. is feeling the feelings of the character. or is blind, like in this story.
56Sanseui-kittyonce again i'm speechless. you're an amazing writer. I love the detail. you're so descriptive it's as if the reader is in the story. is feeling the feelings of the character. or is blind, like in this story.
6/5/2006 c1 16Noir Fleurir
eek never looked at the lack of half my eyesight in that way nice stuff tho i dont see black...hehe just going from experience, nice work love it
16Noir Fleurireek never looked at the lack of half my eyesight in that way nice stuff tho i dont see black...hehe just going from experience, nice work love it
5/21/2006 c1 5Leighton Carrington
this isnt strange at all, it's hardcore, just like all our other works. I liked it and it makes me feel really really bad for blind people.
5Leighton Carringtonthis isnt strange at all, it's hardcore, just like all our other works. I liked it and it makes me feel really really bad for blind people.
5/11/2006 c1 shifter
That was excellent. I really like how you personified her and how you went through the senses. The words flow well too, it's very smooth throughout, no hiccups or gaps. It's such a well done piece!
That was excellent. I really like how you personified her and how you went through the senses. The words flow well too, it's very smooth throughout, no hiccups or gaps. It's such a well done piece!
5/4/2006 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
I love this! ...it's SO going on my favorites list. Maybe it's because I like to see things through different perspectives (just look at my characters) or, very likely, the beauty and simplicity of your writing makes it so real, this had incredible appeal to me. Of course there are questions in my mind as to how she became blind and why and all, but I'm glad you don't answer them. It leaves mystery and scope for imagination. :)
20Pheobe MeryllI love this! ...it's SO going on my favorites list. Maybe it's because I like to see things through different perspectives (just look at my characters) or, very likely, the beauty and simplicity of your writing makes it so real, this had incredible appeal to me. Of course there are questions in my mind as to how she became blind and why and all, but I'm glad you don't answer them. It leaves mystery and scope for imagination. :)
5/3/2006 c1 28emilyrachel18
I actually really like this peice. The first thing that caught me was the description in it which seems slightly ironic as the girl can't see. I think this adds effect to the peice as although she cannot see things all her other senses are alive. The ending is a real eye opener(not meant to be a pun) Love is blind. That is true. I think that although alot of other senses are awoken when you are in love they do not match to the senses of a blind person. I think that in a way love can inhibit your natural sense which does not happen when you are blind. I love the metaphor though, it's amazing, it has really got me thinking.
Thanks for reviewing my poem it means alot to me, especially The Cheating Game.
28emilyrachel18I actually really like this peice. The first thing that caught me was the description in it which seems slightly ironic as the girl can't see. I think this adds effect to the peice as although she cannot see things all her other senses are alive. The ending is a real eye opener(not meant to be a pun) Love is blind. That is true. I think that although alot of other senses are awoken when you are in love they do not match to the senses of a blind person. I think that in a way love can inhibit your natural sense which does not happen when you are blind. I love the metaphor though, it's amazing, it has really got me thinking.
Thanks for reviewing my poem it means alot to me, especially The Cheating Game.
4/26/2006 c1 5jacqueline oliver
it wasnt like i excepted, but it was great. I dont know what else to say.
5jacqueline oliverit wasnt like i excepted, but it was great. I dont know what else to say.
4/21/2006 c1 67Helpless-Dreamer01
OO! very interesting. I like it. The words of use. I love it how it just makes her seem blind. The last line makes you think...
well done my dear! Love ya sis! Love dani
67Helpless-Dreamer01OO! very interesting. I like it. The words of use. I love it how it just makes her seem blind. The last line makes you think...
well done my dear! Love ya sis! Love dani
4/17/2006 c1 2Viera Wing
I'm not quite sure what to make of this. It looks like it's more of a one-shot thing, where you just want to convey some sort of message. Love is blind most of the time, isn't it? And you put it into...um, what's the word, corporeal(?) form? It is a strange way to describe love, but interesting, nonetheless.
And thanks for the review, but I don't get what you mean by Diane 'seeming to be out of it'. Sorry you weren't happy by that, though.
2Viera WingI'm not quite sure what to make of this. It looks like it's more of a one-shot thing, where you just want to convey some sort of message. Love is blind most of the time, isn't it? And you put it into...um, what's the word, corporeal(?) form? It is a strange way to describe love, but interesting, nonetheless.
And thanks for the review, but I don't get what you mean by Diane 'seeming to be out of it'. Sorry you weren't happy by that, though.