6/28/2010 c22 Vaelynne
so... now i know the ending... and i'm trying really hard not to cry. i actually like the first ending better than ending b. Even though i feel that almost all fiction should end happily (because reality sucks) i think you should keep the first one... because as depressing as it was, it wasnt totally miserable.
so... now i know the ending... and i'm trying really hard not to cry. i actually like the first ending better than ending b. Even though i feel that almost all fiction should end happily (because reality sucks) i think you should keep the first one... because as depressing as it was, it wasnt totally miserable.
6/28/2010 c1 Vaelynne
so, this story is completely revised and not missing chapters 14-49 and more? im just making sure, i started reading this then looked at the the chapter titles and it led me to believe it was all out of whack =P also... that AN was a spoiler =/ i vote that Atticus stays ALIVE.
so, this story is completely revised and not missing chapters 14-49 and more? im just making sure, i started reading this then looked at the the chapter titles and it led me to believe it was all out of whack =P also... that AN was a spoiler =/ i vote that Atticus stays ALIVE.
6/28/2010 c21 browneyes33
I think that the ending you should choose is the one where she's pregnant with atticus's child. I think that the kid could be a teenager and something bad happens to her and her kid, like being homeless or something. then atticus finds her kid and offers to help not knowing it's his kid too or hers. Then he finds out who the kids mom is and then...
Seriously don't go with the 2nd ending because it sucks.
I think that the ending you should choose is the one where she's pregnant with atticus's child. I think that the kid could be a teenager and something bad happens to her and her kid, like being homeless or something. then atticus finds her kid and offers to help not knowing it's his kid too or hers. Then he finds out who the kids mom is and then...
Seriously don't go with the 2nd ending because it sucks.
6/23/2010 c32 xxshellyx
i have just finished reading this story and i think that the first ending was better, where will Once Upon A Nightmare be started? as i looked on your profile and couldlnt find it. x
i have just finished reading this story and i think that the first ending was better, where will Once Upon A Nightmare be started? as i looked on your profile and couldlnt find it. x
6/17/2010 c28 ixamxeverywhere
I dont know if you still recieve emails about reviews if the story is complete, but it can't hurt to try.
I have a question:
What exactly is so illegal about the Under Ground? Is it that they're harboring run aways or something? If you get this, please PM me because I'm awefully curious ^_^"
I dont know if you still recieve emails about reviews if the story is complete, but it can't hurt to try.
I have a question:
What exactly is so illegal about the Under Ground? Is it that they're harboring run aways or something? If you get this, please PM me because I'm awefully curious ^_^"
5/5/2010 c54 1Raiya-shi
@#$%^&^%$#@#$%^&* WHY? Are you ever going to continue the sequel cause it's 2010 last time you updated was in 2007... AND WHY DI YOU KILL ATTICUS? AND GIVE NO WARNING? TT-TT you should add the genre of tragedy... *goes off to cry somewhere but stills adds to alert list cause she really wants to know what happens next... *
@#$%^&^%$#@#$%^&* WHY? Are you ever going to continue the sequel cause it's 2010 last time you updated was in 2007... AND WHY DI YOU KILL ATTICUS? AND GIVE NO WARNING? TT-TT you should add the genre of tragedy... *goes off to cry somewhere but stills adds to alert list cause she really wants to know what happens next... *
4/18/2010 c1 silentscream4luv
I really should of seen that this was a angst. I don't like those. I thought maybe he was pretendin to be dead so that he could get away or something. It was a good story.. But the ending wasn't for me. Sorry. Keep up the good work though.
I really should of seen that this was a angst. I don't like those. I thought maybe he was pretendin to be dead so that he could get away or something. It was a good story.. But the ending wasn't for me. Sorry. Keep up the good work though.
9/17/2009 c54 MarieAnn
AMAZING STORY! I really enjoyed reading it. Are you still planning on putting up the sequel? I would really love to read it.
GREAT JOB!
AMAZING STORY! I really enjoyed reading it. Are you still planning on putting up the sequel? I would really love to read it.
GREAT JOB!
6/16/2009 c55 reader
Ok, thanks. It was an interesting story, and I was into it throughout. I think you had a great concept, and...well, I guess it is the real-world type literature. I guess your aim is different from my aim; you want to create something memorably tragic, I wanted some escapism, and because of that difference, I was disappointed in the end. I think that you could have made it all happen a little more slowly at the end though, because there have been times where I have been really, really touched by some tragic ending, but I felt like this ending wasn't it.
I really appreciate your writing and posting this! :D
Ok, thanks. It was an interesting story, and I was into it throughout. I think you had a great concept, and...well, I guess it is the real-world type literature. I guess your aim is different from my aim; you want to create something memorably tragic, I wanted some escapism, and because of that difference, I was disappointed in the end. I think that you could have made it all happen a little more slowly at the end though, because there have been times where I have been really, really touched by some tragic ending, but I felt like this ending wasn't it.
I really appreciate your writing and posting this! :D
6/16/2009 c53 reader
Wow, this is a nightmare.
I seriously did not read all this just to get cheated out of a good ending. :(
Btw, "government cheaters" gives a good idea of why the police are so determined to find the Underground. That's the kind of "justification" I was looking for earlier.
Wow, this is a nightmare.
I seriously did not read all this just to get cheated out of a good ending. :(
Btw, "government cheaters" gives a good idea of why the police are so determined to find the Underground. That's the kind of "justification" I was looking for earlier.
6/16/2009 c46 reader
Intense. I still think you should explain a little more clearly (albeit subtly) why it is imperative that the Underground is not in collaboration with the police department/ why the police department is SO intent on tracking them down...what exactly did Kerstin tell the police that made the response so strong?
Intense. I still think you should explain a little more clearly (albeit subtly) why it is imperative that the Underground is not in collaboration with the police department/ why the police department is SO intent on tracking them down...what exactly did Kerstin tell the police that made the response so strong?
6/15/2009 c39 reader
Wow, incredible twist! I had NO idea that was coming! I thought that the papers mentioned earlier were some twisted Underground requirement or something, and when the woman appeared, I thought it might have been Abigail or even an ex, but not that! =D
Wow, incredible twist! I had NO idea that was coming! I thought that the papers mentioned earlier were some twisted Underground requirement or something, and when the woman appeared, I thought it might have been Abigail or even an ex, but not that! =D
6/15/2009 c32 reader
Wow, that's messed up! And he still is against Atticus even after all the good things Alaiah said about him? MESSED UP! o_O
Btw, I suggest that you break that monster paragraph of Alaiah's thoughts up? It's daunting to look at and difficult to read because all the text is together in one huge block. I think it's a great part of the story to have though because it really gives the reader more insight into her character.
Wow, that's messed up! And he still is against Atticus even after all the good things Alaiah said about him? MESSED UP! o_O
Btw, I suggest that you break that monster paragraph of Alaiah's thoughts up? It's daunting to look at and difficult to read because all the text is together in one huge block. I think it's a great part of the story to have though because it really gives the reader more insight into her character.
6/15/2009 c22 reader
^_^
^_^
6/15/2009 c18 reader
Yeah...the don't thing has really been bothering me in the last two chapters; just ctrl+f it on each page to make sure your conjugations are right. This type of error is the most blatant one.
Yeah...the don't thing has really been bothering me in the last two chapters; just ctrl+f it on each page to make sure your conjugations are right. This type of error is the most blatant one.