
4/11/2006 c1
224Ryan Schiff
What are you trying to say? Your metaphores don't make any sense... Your hand is the buzzer its self... Understand your hologram...
Overall, this poem is not well written, peppered with big and fancy words but lacking in substance.
Stanzas help, too.

What are you trying to say? Your metaphores don't make any sense... Your hand is the buzzer its self... Understand your hologram...
Overall, this poem is not well written, peppered with big and fancy words but lacking in substance.
Stanzas help, too.