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4/16/2006 c1 87Naibz
I like this. it has a nice flow and the impact of emotion is delivered pretty well, but I would change the last 2 lines to somethign like this "And what I was morning;

Mourning my dreams of course"

just think it would flow better and potray what you are trying to say a little bit better.
4/16/2006 c1 138simply meg
hhm... pretty cool.Nice work:)

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