for Tales in a Thunderstorm4/21/2006 c1 
10Kennisiou
*Applauds.* Very good, very good. I loved your use of detail and the pacing was not off as far as I could tell. A very good hook, I am left wanting more. I noticed quite a few of the mechanical errors Mik did, but none that he didn't. The man is thorough. I also really liked how you portrayed to relationship between Fioni and Aricin. It seemed like the typical father/son relationship you'd see on family TV shows, but at the same time it didn't feel cliched.
10Kennisiou*Applauds.* Very good, very good. I loved your use of detail and the pacing was not off as far as I could tell. A very good hook, I am left wanting more. I noticed quite a few of the mechanical errors Mik did, but none that he didn't. The man is thorough. I also really liked how you portrayed to relationship between Fioni and Aricin. It seemed like the typical father/son relationship you'd see on family TV shows, but at the same time it didn't feel cliched.
4/18/2006 c1 Artemis Dreamweaver
[too lazy to sign in] It took me a minute, but I finally realized what story this was. And other than the mechanics Mik so kindly pointed out, I think it was cool, as always. Man I wish you would continue this!
P.S. It still makes me giggle.
[too lazy to sign in] It took me a minute, but I finally realized what story this was. And other than the mechanics Mik so kindly pointed out, I think it was cool, as always. Man I wish you would continue this!
P.S. It still makes me giggle.
4/16/2006 c1 2yoo-hoo luver w. legs
Dang that was good! And you better write more... (shakes fist at you) I like Fioni already. oh and I stuck you on my favorite author and story list.WRITE MORE!
2yoo-hoo luver w. legsDang that was good! And you better write more... (shakes fist at you) I like Fioni already. oh and I stuck you on my favorite author and story list.WRITE MORE!
4/16/2006 c1 5ChaosRequiem
Wow, incredible first chapter. I really enjoy your use of descriptive language, and your attention to detail. The irony that a demon can love is not lost on me eiher, and I wonder if this is from another source. Please continue the story, as it sounds like a great one.
5ChaosRequiemWow, incredible first chapter. I really enjoy your use of descriptive language, and your attention to detail. The irony that a demon can love is not lost on me eiher, and I wonder if this is from another source. Please continue the story, as it sounds like a great one.