for My Butterflies4/17/2006 c3 
1rrmehta364
You know they banned ice cream vans from tinkling in our neighborhood because it 'annoys people' I really think people are getting ridiculous.
Whoa, second person. Always strange and disturbing to read.
Especially when you check and realize there is no red nailpolish on your feet, or anywhere in your general periphrey.
Well, I really liked the last lines. Very poetic. Actually, this whole set of stories is really poetic.
Looking forward to reading more.
-peace out.
1rrmehta364You know they banned ice cream vans from tinkling in our neighborhood because it 'annoys people' I really think people are getting ridiculous.
Whoa, second person. Always strange and disturbing to read.
Especially when you check and realize there is no red nailpolish on your feet, or anywhere in your general periphrey.
Well, I really liked the last lines. Very poetic. Actually, this whole set of stories is really poetic.
Looking forward to reading more.
-peace out.
4/17/2006 c2 rrmehta364
Whats with the funny format. I'm guessing you did it on purpose, but I think its a little distracting.
That said, I really like what I read.
"She appeared around the corner, an average looking girl." : I don't think the second bit counts as a clause because it doesn't have a verb, nor does it represent a complete thought.
"Her hands were thrust into her pockets, almost as if she was desperately clinging on to the earth." : what do having hands in your pockets have to do with clinging to Earth?
Well, I really liked what I read and will therefore promptly read the next chapter.
-peace out.
Whats with the funny format. I'm guessing you did it on purpose, but I think its a little distracting.
That said, I really like what I read.
"She appeared around the corner, an average looking girl." : I don't think the second bit counts as a clause because it doesn't have a verb, nor does it represent a complete thought.
"Her hands were thrust into her pockets, almost as if she was desperately clinging on to the earth." : what do having hands in your pockets have to do with clinging to Earth?
Well, I really liked what I read and will therefore promptly read the next chapter.
-peace out.
4/17/2006 c2 nadljfaithglingh
I loved this story. '...as if she might suddenly start dancing.' loved that line, too. And how it ended. You are just so gosh darn talented! :) ::hands cookie::
I loved this story. '...as if she might suddenly start dancing.' loved that line, too. And how it ended. You are just so gosh darn talented! :) ::hands cookie::