for The First Kiss8/4/2009 c1 
4k.maag
Wow, that sucks! Not the story, the situation. xD MINDFUCK!
See? You can totally write realistically; you just don't trust yourself enough. :)
4k.maagWow, that sucks! Not the story, the situation. xD MINDFUCK!
See? You can totally write realistically; you just don't trust yourself enough. :)
4/22/2009 c1 10BeeSkeez
This is really good.
You're a really good writer. It's really nicely descrpitive, you know, which makes it really nice to read. And I like the idea of it being in Paris. Makes it more romantic. lol.
good work
Bee
ps. Thanks for your review, it was super helpful!
10BeeSkeezThis is really good.
You're a really good writer. It's really nicely descrpitive, you know, which makes it really nice to read. And I like the idea of it being in Paris. Makes it more romantic. lol.
good work
Bee
ps. Thanks for your review, it was super helpful!
2/11/2009 c1 9Narq
Aww... poor girl! Poor poor kid. I hope one day someone will love her the way she loves him.
Great writing!
9NarqAww... poor girl! Poor poor kid. I hope one day someone will love her the way she loves him.
Great writing!
1/27/2008 c1 CandleQueen
I really liked this. The analogies you used where colorful, and it kept my interest. Well done.
^_^
-Ramen
P.S. I'm currently trying to pimp out my story. lol If you get any time, will you check it out? It's called Unborn...
I really liked this. The analogies you used where colorful, and it kept my interest. Well done.
^_^
-Ramen
P.S. I'm currently trying to pimp out my story. lol If you get any time, will you check it out? It's called Unborn...
4/17/2006 c1 14Irony's.Last.Words.Were
Wow. It's deep, but not too describing. I lik eit. It's fast paced and real. It's cool. But how did they come to be in Paris? Who is the 'she' that made him sit next to her? How do they know each other?Can't wait for your next chapter! Update soon!
-Infraction of the Vassalaged Spirit
14Irony's.Last.Words.WereWow. It's deep, but not too describing. I lik eit. It's fast paced and real. It's cool. But how did they come to be in Paris? Who is the 'she' that made him sit next to her? How do they know each other?Can't wait for your next chapter! Update soon!
-Infraction of the Vassalaged Spirit