for Unforgettable5/19/2006 c1 
24frayedlifeforce
'you’ve seen both heaven and hell
reflected in burning sunsets and shooting stars'
those lines were the essence of the poem. you captured everything in those two lines and brought wonderful imagery with it,fantastic work.
24frayedlifeforce'you’ve seen both heaven and hell
reflected in burning sunsets and shooting stars'
those lines were the essence of the poem. you captured everything in those two lines and brought wonderful imagery with it,fantastic work.
4/28/2006 c1 79Ashes.to.Acid
I apologize for not reviewing sooner..
I *love* the parenthesis at the bottom.. it's so true. Once again, your works are heartbreaking and beautiful - a morbid attraction that I never get enough of.
79Ashes.to.AcidI apologize for not reviewing sooner..
I *love* the parenthesis at the bottom.. it's so true. Once again, your works are heartbreaking and beautiful - a morbid attraction that I never get enough of.
4/27/2006 c1 238classic violet
That last line touched me. Beautiful."being a martyr is just a tragic obsession" I love this line especially.
238classic violetThat last line touched me. Beautiful."being a martyr is just a tragic obsession" I love this line especially.
4/27/2006 c1 11les petits bateaux
Oh wow. There are really no words to describe the emotion that's running through me right now. Your poem is just...brilliant. The imagery and the power in this really overwhelms. Excellent.
11les petits bateauxOh wow. There are really no words to describe the emotion that's running through me right now. Your poem is just...brilliant. The imagery and the power in this really overwhelms. Excellent.
4/26/2006 c1 a lonely september
i love the last two lines... this is ag rat poem. love the way it's written, the way this chick is described. awesome. its been ages. what's up?
i love the last two lines... this is ag rat poem. love the way it's written, the way this chick is described. awesome. its been ages. what's up?
4/26/2006 c1 17sunday night sky
'(it gets a little complicatedwhen you find beauty in the breakdown)' this whole poem is amazing, but especially the parenthesis, and especially the last bit of parenthesis. love it.
17sunday night sky'(it gets a little complicatedwhen you find beauty in the breakdown)' this whole poem is amazing, but especially the parenthesis, and especially the last bit of parenthesis. love it.
4/23/2006 c1 24she's not breathing
i love all the contrasts you have here, & your descriptive voice. "being a martyr is just a tragic obsession", "that’s the price you pay/ to gaze into the crystal mist/ and try to convince yourself that you’re unforgettable" - i love the jaded, smug tone of that. i'm not sure if i like the image of the flat tire & the broken-down car at the end because it doesn't fit with the rest of the imagery you used, but the final two lines are beautiful. nice job.
~kait
24she's not breathingi love all the contrasts you have here, & your descriptive voice. "being a martyr is just a tragic obsession", "that’s the price you pay/ to gaze into the crystal mist/ and try to convince yourself that you’re unforgettable" - i love the jaded, smug tone of that. i'm not sure if i like the image of the flat tire & the broken-down car at the end because it doesn't fit with the rest of the imagery you used, but the final two lines are beautiful. nice job.
~kait
4/23/2006 c1 16insomnia in dreamland
heart-wrenching. curious and painful, it just rips out your heart and leaves you in tears. it was so intense and morbid, yet there is so much passion in it, which makes it beautiful.
"shot your 20mm.because lies don’t break hearts"
^♥'ed that line. beautiful and truthful.
great job.
{faves}
16insomnia in dreamlandheart-wrenching. curious and painful, it just rips out your heart and leaves you in tears. it was so intense and morbid, yet there is so much passion in it, which makes it beautiful.
"shot your 20mm.because lies don’t break hearts"
^♥'ed that line. beautiful and truthful.
great job.
{faves}
4/22/2006 c1 Little Junkie
the tone in this poem is very sharp. there were two lines that reminded me exactly of two songs...creative borrowing perhaps? but I liked this don't worry.
I would paste my favourite line here but I can't seem to pick one! tis too hard!:):)
the tone in this poem is very sharp. there were two lines that reminded me exactly of two songs...creative borrowing perhaps? but I liked this don't worry.
I would paste my favourite line here but I can't seem to pick one! tis too hard!:):)
4/22/2006 c1 132mizu no kokoro
wow, i like the language and style of this piece, very powerful yet elegant at the same time.
keep writing!
132mizu no kokorowow, i like the language and style of this piece, very powerful yet elegant at the same time.
keep writing!