for One Man, One Creature, One War, and One Betrayal8/7/2007 c5 
6Runningflame
Good story! I'd really like to see what his life is like after he joins the creatures. Some cultural disconnect there, I would presume! ^_^ There's just a couple of places where you used the wrong word: "threw" when you meant "through", for example, or "brake" when you meant "break". A few minutes with a dictionary ought to clear that up. I didn't like the swearing, either... but that's my personal preference. Good work!
6RunningflameGood story! I'd really like to see what his life is like after he joins the creatures. Some cultural disconnect there, I would presume! ^_^ There's just a couple of places where you used the wrong word: "threw" when you meant "through", for example, or "brake" when you meant "break". A few minutes with a dictionary ought to clear that up. I didn't like the swearing, either... but that's my personal preference. Good work!
8/25/2006 c5 Silent Force
Oh, cool chapter! I liked the whole thing at the end with the gargoyles breaking out of their shells. The whole thing was just set up very well - starting off with a bit of humor (well, I found someone yelling 'Da!' funny, but that might just be me ^_^), building up suspense with the mysterious cloaked figure, and so on. Nice job, and keep wriitng!
Oh, cool chapter! I liked the whole thing at the end with the gargoyles breaking out of their shells. The whole thing was just set up very well - starting off with a bit of humor (well, I found someone yelling 'Da!' funny, but that might just be me ^_^), building up suspense with the mysterious cloaked figure, and so on. Nice job, and keep wriitng!
8/25/2006 c4 Silent Force
Sorry it took me so long to review! This chapter wasn't that boring; I can see that it was necessary to keep the story moving. I'm sure it will get more exciting later, anyhow. I'm still interested as to what happens to Seek!
One spelling mistake - "I crossed threw alleys and walked threw pubs and stores" (threw is the past tense of throwing something; you need to use the word 'through')
Overall, nice job! I'm going to read Ch. 5 now.
Sorry it took me so long to review! This chapter wasn't that boring; I can see that it was necessary to keep the story moving. I'm sure it will get more exciting later, anyhow. I'm still interested as to what happens to Seek!
One spelling mistake - "I crossed threw alleys and walked threw pubs and stores" (threw is the past tense of throwing something; you need to use the word 'through')
Overall, nice job! I'm going to read Ch. 5 now.
8/4/2006 c5 1JJSLAM2129
Great story! A few minor spelling errors, but overall, the grammar is fine. Update soon, please!
1JJSLAM2129Great story! A few minor spelling errors, but overall, the grammar is fine. Update soon, please!
8/4/2006 c5 3Adaku
Hey you finally updated! Thank you! Though did other story you posted was nice too. Even if you have writer's block it's nice to at least post something. Hm...your writing looks like mine. Keep writing. Till next time
waterhealer
3AdakuHey you finally updated! Thank you! Though did other story you posted was nice too. Even if you have writer's block it's nice to at least post something. Hm...your writing looks like mine. Keep writing. Till next time
waterhealer
6/17/2006 c3 Silent Force
These are very interesting developments... I can only sense that this story is getting better and better. Nice twist at the end with the King attacking Abith. Oh, and by the way, I like your characters' names.
There were a couple of very minor spelling mistakes - "thatn" instead of "than" and "siolence" instead of "silence", but that's it. Overall, you're doing a good job with grammar and spelling.
Nice job with this chapter; I'll be back to read more another time!
These are very interesting developments... I can only sense that this story is getting better and better. Nice twist at the end with the King attacking Abith. Oh, and by the way, I like your characters' names.
There were a couple of very minor spelling mistakes - "thatn" instead of "than" and "siolence" instead of "silence", but that's it. Overall, you're doing a good job with grammar and spelling.
Nice job with this chapter; I'll be back to read more another time!
6/2/2006 c4 Adaku
so are you going to writers block? Or you're just running out of ideas, just a thought. Anyway, about the chapter I thought it was alright. Overall great job. Keep wiritng on. Till next time
Never Change! ^_^
waterhealer
so are you going to writers block? Or you're just running out of ideas, just a thought. Anyway, about the chapter I thought it was alright. Overall great job. Keep wiritng on. Till next time
Never Change! ^_^
waterhealer
5/31/2006 c3 Adaku
“SIOLENCE!” I think you misspelled silence, with the o, but over all great chapter. Looking forward for more
waterhealer
“SIOLENCE!” I think you misspelled silence, with the o, but over all great chapter. Looking forward for more
waterhealer
5/20/2006 c3 Silent Deception
well i geust i can say this... i am officaly hooked onto this story. you really did step up to the plate and made it a very good story. come out with your next chapter soon. I will be waiting.
well i geust i can say this... i am officaly hooked onto this story. you really did step up to the plate and made it a very good story. come out with your next chapter soon. I will be waiting.
5/20/2006 c2 Silent Force
Nice continuation of the plot. You're going at a good pace - not too fast, not too slow. I continue to be interested in Seek, and I like the addition of Mia'shon as a character. I'd like to see where you take this next. Good job with the chapter!
Nice continuation of the plot. You're going at a good pace - not too fast, not too slow. I continue to be interested in Seek, and I like the addition of Mia'shon as a character. I'd like to see where you take this next. Good job with the chapter!
5/11/2006 c3 7Bitter.Sweet.Endings
awesomenes. Watch your spelling, though.
oh, and thnx for the review. Dont worry, It wont turn out ANYTHING like goosebumps. ; )
7Bitter.Sweet.Endingsawesomenes. Watch your spelling, though.
oh, and thnx for the review. Dont worry, It wont turn out ANYTHING like goosebumps. ; )
5/7/2006 c3 20Pheobe Meryll
So...the king has some supernatural powers on his side, huh? Interesting..again, I think your plot is promising; however if you're looking into publishing you'll need to look into some of the grammar issues you're having. I won't go through the trouble of correcting them unless you want me to though. anyway best luck!
20Pheobe MeryllSo...the king has some supernatural powers on his side, huh? Interesting..again, I think your plot is promising; however if you're looking into publishing you'll need to look into some of the grammar issues you're having. I won't go through the trouble of correcting them unless you want me to though. anyway best luck!
5/7/2006 c2 Pheobe Meryll
Hm! Interesting! I liked this chapter, and the turn of events. I'm following the story pretty well and I like your style.
Hm! Interesting! I liked this chapter, and the turn of events. I'm following the story pretty well and I like your style.
5/2/2006 c1 Pheobe Meryll
Oh centaurs...I love centaurs. A little dangerous, though!
hmm well I thought this established an interesting beginning. There were a fair amount of grammar mistakes but I'm not sure how much help you're looking for there. I'd certainly like to know the cause of all this fighting - does it have something to do with the taxes?
Oh centaurs...I love centaurs. A little dangerous, though!
hmm well I thought this established an interesting beginning. There were a fair amount of grammar mistakes but I'm not sure how much help you're looking for there. I'd certainly like to know the cause of all this fighting - does it have something to do with the taxes?