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12/27/2007 c1 612simpleplan13
that ending is horrible (not the way its written just the idea of that) nice repetition of the questions and the lonely child... sad and beautiful
4/16/2007 c1 Her Wishing Well
OMG that last stanza is intense. This was so sad.
4/10/2007 c1 M. Williams
:(

Reads like a song. I like it.

But :(.
9/24/2006 c1 113Travis C. Eckert
Wow that last line just kills the mood, no joke.
9/2/2006 c1 12Panicking With Hesitation
this is soo sad... *tears* i love it!keep writing.
8/27/2006 c1 24Tr APeze-sWiNGer
Chilling.

The repetition is wonderful.

Thanks for the review!
8/9/2006 c1 31Leaving Here
its like a sad love song...i like it.its great. leaves you wanting to hug ur parents and tell 'em your sorry. u no?its great.~Liz
7/7/2006 c1 46Former Kimmi Gray
Oh... I want to hug the child and take it home with me. This was such an emotional writting and I totally wasn't expecting the end. Great job!

Thanks for the reveiw, glad you liked it.
5/28/2006 c1 12Solid-Truth
This seemed strained in areas, and the rhyming at the end made me lose thought of what happened in the poem. Nice work, though.
5/20/2006 c1 92burning in effigy
Oh. haunting. I imagined how the child would say the ending, and it sound so innocent and the child doesn't really understand what's going on.

Repetition was nice; overall, very nice poem :)
5/17/2006 c1 132mizu no kokoro
sometimes i wish i had no parents... but then the pain cannot be compared and having what you wish for is not a good thing sometimes.

keep writing
5/17/2006 c1 twoofspades
I like your style, most of your poetry seems to flow well.
5/2/2006 c1 85Embellished Heart
WoW! Loved this piece. The layout and flow are great, and the ending really makes it. Great work. Keep it up!

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