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5/9/2006 c1 16Cloudsinthesky
i like this a lot, peeing in a cup takes real strength, don't think i'd be able to do that lol good job with this. Yet agian your words have a nice flow. Keep up the good work.
5/6/2006 c1 30Raiyune
Your poem has a very good rhythm... I found that some of the other writers on fiction press sacrificed their rhythm in order to rhyme, but you were able to satisfy both categories. I especially love the ending. Nice job, keep writing. :]
5/6/2006 c1 270queenvixta
Firstly thanks for your review, it meant a lot. Secondly, great poem! The rhyming is excellent and very original. The last verse was my favourite. Beautifully written, well done. Vx

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