for Notice for you5/7/2006 c1 
92randompoetry
Hmm, I liked it, except I didnt understand the shoes kaching part. It was pretty good except I didnt like that part.
92randompoetryHmm, I liked it, except I didnt understand the shoes kaching part. It was pretty good except I didnt like that part.
5/7/2006 c1 21inxyourxeyes
I think if you d.i.d.n.'t.h.a.v.e.w.o.r.d.s.l.i.k.e.t.h.i.s it'd give a lot more integrity to the piece. And you kind of lost me here : "Shoes. I want some new shoes.Bling. Ka-ching."But I really liked the last verse or phrase or whatever. It has like a childish immaturity about such a serious thing. Keep on writing ~-^
21inxyourxeyesI think if you d.i.d.n.'t.h.a.v.e.w.o.r.d.s.l.i.k.e.t.h.i.s it'd give a lot more integrity to the piece. And you kind of lost me here : "Shoes. I want some new shoes.Bling. Ka-ching."But I really liked the last verse or phrase or whatever. It has like a childish immaturity about such a serious thing. Keep on writing ~-^