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5/12/2006 c1 29Katterree Fengari
curious...you make an interesting scene.

A couple things- if the "Black shadows dance dutifully" is happening when the "pixies took flight" you'd want it all to be in past tence. Also, in "Sparked by passed light", it doesn't make sense, I think you meant "past" or "passing". I really like the ending. The poem has a touch of mysteriousness.
5/7/2006 c1 xXxdark daysxXx
nice

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