for The Light in Darkness12/11/2006 c1 
9BenevolentShadow
Pretty... in a kind of sad, morbid way. But I like it. I'm glad Derek was there to help you. I was friends with a girl who hurt herself... I was not able save her...
Just remember to always keep looking for your angel- and never forget, even if you lose yours some day, that they are always there- some where..
9BenevolentShadowPretty... in a kind of sad, morbid way. But I like it. I'm glad Derek was there to help you. I was friends with a girl who hurt herself... I was not able save her...
Just remember to always keep looking for your angel- and never forget, even if you lose yours some day, that they are always there- some where..
5/31/2006 c1 133Dying Rose
Though not your best work, I do like this poem. I think it got too long and you ran out of things to say, because the closer you got to the end, the more the wording started slipping. I admire the courage it takes to write a poem directly aimed at someone so special, with his name even in it. You've got some just incredible lines and comparisons in here...I just love "A lost soul swimming in a sea of darkness/A Sea of Self-Loathing" - that is such an amazing description. Good job!
133Dying RoseThough not your best work, I do like this poem. I think it got too long and you ran out of things to say, because the closer you got to the end, the more the wording started slipping. I admire the courage it takes to write a poem directly aimed at someone so special, with his name even in it. You've got some just incredible lines and comparisons in here...I just love "A lost soul swimming in a sea of darkness/A Sea of Self-Loathing" - that is such an amazing description. Good job!
5/8/2006 c1 11i.am.cyril
awesome.but kinda long.loved the 'sliced the silver bar across the gate' thingy.write more!
11i.am.cyrilawesome.but kinda long.loved the 'sliced the silver bar across the gate' thingy.write more!