for Infatuation3/9/2008 c1 123454321
'And dwell on imperfection'- Grammatically I think it should have an 's' on 'imperfection' and it shouldn't detract from your rhyming scheme.
The last two lines are very apropos, I think, considering what was said earlier in the piece. They are my favorite.
-J.A.
Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile).
'And dwell on imperfection'- Grammatically I think it should have an 's' on 'imperfection' and it shouldn't detract from your rhyming scheme.
The last two lines are very apropos, I think, considering what was said earlier in the piece. They are my favorite.
-J.A.
Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile).
9/4/2006 c1 
86Isis lives
nice poem! I love the imagery that of all the different aspects of a crush. But still my favourite lines are the first 4:
"Crushes are sickening
A painful infatuation
That tears us apart
With such desperation"
so true. What a bummer XD.
Keep writing, as always,
Isis x
86Isis livesnice poem! I love the imagery that of all the different aspects of a crush. But still my favourite lines are the first 4:
"Crushes are sickening
A painful infatuation
That tears us apart
With such desperation"
so true. What a bummer XD.
Keep writing, as always,
Isis x
5/28/2006 c1 48iwillshine
huh its funny as i was reading this it sounded exactly like what just happened today pretty much! LOVED IT!(11)
48iwillshinehuh its funny as i was reading this it sounded exactly like what just happened today pretty much! LOVED IT!(11)
5/11/2006 c1 42Anecdotes Of The Arcane
fuck, so true. Loved the ending for some sick twisted reason, it was witty and striking. Damn you!
42Anecdotes Of The Arcanefuck, so true. Loved the ending for some sick twisted reason, it was witty and striking. Damn you!
5/10/2006 c1 5ErrorDexis
Wow, so painfully true; cut me deep. I love to see the work of my reviewers and thank them.
so here goes.
Thanks!
5ErrorDexisWow, so painfully true; cut me deep. I love to see the work of my reviewers and thank them.
so here goes.
Thanks!