for A Little More Touch Me9/9/2007 c1 
3Back of Beyond
Sounds like it will be a really good story - hope you get round to updating this soon. :D
3Back of BeyondSounds like it will be a really good story - hope you get round to updating this soon. :D
3/23/2007 c1 20210403
All that bickering... they're sexually frustrated, let them have sex already xD. jk jk, but really, nice introduction~! Awkward confessions... especially to your best friend who is also the same sex lol. Oi, makes me feel antsy and awkward all over too lol.
You really do have a talent for writing! I need to read more to improve my starving skills :(. I'm quite sad in that category even though I think I have spanktackingly awesome ideas . :3 *lick lick*
~Sei
All that bickering... they're sexually frustrated, let them have sex already xD. jk jk, but really, nice introduction~! Awkward confessions... especially to your best friend who is also the same sex lol. Oi, makes me feel antsy and awkward all over too lol.
You really do have a talent for writing! I need to read more to improve my starving skills :(. I'm quite sad in that category even though I think I have spanktackingly awesome ideas . :3 *lick lick*
~Sei
12/6/2006 c1 11NothingInHerGlassGreyEyes
You're crazy, and i love the beginning. This could be an "interesting" story, i'm waiting for more!
-opti
11NothingInHerGlassGreyEyesYou're crazy, and i love the beginning. This could be an "interesting" story, i'm waiting for more!
-opti
10/30/2006 c1 2Icarus-Rising
I would really like to see the prequel to this… it would be interesting to read about how a close friendship gets damaged by a fight.
But first, please continue with this!
Thanks for reading my story as well
2Icarus-RisingI would really like to see the prequel to this… it would be interesting to read about how a close friendship gets damaged by a fight.
But first, please continue with this!
Thanks for reading my story as well
10/4/2006 c1 4kristalyn
Good start! Now I really want to know exactly why Jay and Dom fought. Update soon please :)
4kristalynGood start! Now I really want to know exactly why Jay and Dom fought. Update soon please :)
6/9/2006 c1 The Kait of Lin
I'm impressed, Tori! Its really awesome. Of course, nothing different than anything else you ever write...you tard. I bet that you didn't think I'd read this, huh? You said that you'd have stuff on another username, but I figured I'd check anyway. You know that my opinion of slash stories has changed significantly... And this one is especially well written and awesome so far. Again, nothing unusual there. Update soon, tori! I shall be reminding you... *evil cackle*
~Kaitlin
I'm impressed, Tori! Its really awesome. Of course, nothing different than anything else you ever write...you tard. I bet that you didn't think I'd read this, huh? You said that you'd have stuff on another username, but I figured I'd check anyway. You know that my opinion of slash stories has changed significantly... And this one is especially well written and awesome so far. Again, nothing unusual there. Update soon, tori! I shall be reminding you... *evil cackle*
~Kaitlin
5/13/2006 c1 3Ballerina with a Gun
Yum...slash. Explicit content I hope.
Great story so far-I look forward to more! Hope you update soon!
3Ballerina with a GunYum...slash. Explicit content I hope.
Great story so far-I look forward to more! Hope you update soon!
5/11/2006 c1 XgainMyAgainX
Surprised? Huh? "Dream'o'rdoll"? Lol Just kidding around. All-around a good story, good use of fore-shadowing and loved the intro. Didn't know you wrote these kinds of stories...but I ain't judging you. Hopefully Kait won't read it. Oh well. This piece of work is certainly greater than mine, but still. You've talent I don't know why you don't use it more often. Well that's all basically, you didn't think I'd read it, did you? Well...I'm good like that, I guess I am awesome! Just like you. Anyway, l like it and since I am a critic I will tell you a little bit of what you needed. The setting, work on it a tad more; you did mention it, but not enough uhh whats that called? I dunno but you needed a lil more of that and I loved the dialogue, it was P-E-R-F-E-C-T! The feelings and emotions as well. hm, what else? Well thas it I'm eager to read the next part and you know I WILL find it. alright thats about it... ok? *kisses*
XgainMyAgainX-Melissa
Surprised? Huh? "Dream'o'rdoll"? Lol Just kidding around. All-around a good story, good use of fore-shadowing and loved the intro. Didn't know you wrote these kinds of stories...but I ain't judging you. Hopefully Kait won't read it. Oh well. This piece of work is certainly greater than mine, but still. You've talent I don't know why you don't use it more often. Well that's all basically, you didn't think I'd read it, did you? Well...I'm good like that, I guess I am awesome! Just like you. Anyway, l like it and since I am a critic I will tell you a little bit of what you needed. The setting, work on it a tad more; you did mention it, but not enough uhh whats that called? I dunno but you needed a lil more of that and I loved the dialogue, it was P-E-R-F-E-C-T! The feelings and emotions as well. hm, what else? Well thas it I'm eager to read the next part and you know I WILL find it. alright thats about it... ok? *kisses*
XgainMyAgainX-Melissa
5/9/2006 c1 3Abstruse Blue
It has a really good intriguing start. I'm looking forward to further chapters, keep it up. *is really interested in where this will go* ^ ^
3Abstruse BlueIt has a really good intriguing start. I'm looking forward to further chapters, keep it up. *is really interested in where this will go* ^ ^
5/9/2006 c1 3Broken doll on a dirty shelf
I liked it, I've been off lately besides updates and looking for Slash has really become a hassle since it's rise in the popularity charts but seeing the summary for yours drew me in so I decided I'd like to check it out and an glad I did. I love this already. The imagery of the characters is awesome and the whole first chapter was really intruiging. And you used Fallout Boy. How could I NOT love you? Well, if you don't mind, I'd like to add this to my shelf (check profile for details). It belongs there, in my book.
Harlequin~"I'm not trying to be someone I'm not; I'm trying to be someone you want."
3Broken doll on a dirty shelfI liked it, I've been off lately besides updates and looking for Slash has really become a hassle since it's rise in the popularity charts but seeing the summary for yours drew me in so I decided I'd like to check it out and an glad I did. I love this already. The imagery of the characters is awesome and the whole first chapter was really intruiging. And you used Fallout Boy. How could I NOT love you? Well, if you don't mind, I'd like to add this to my shelf (check profile for details). It belongs there, in my book.
Harlequin~"I'm not trying to be someone I'm not; I'm trying to be someone you want."