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5/10/2006 c1 123dress her up in fairytales
nice piece. flows well. really great lines. keep writing.
5/10/2006 c1 sylvia's syndrome
This is excellent work. This poem flows wonderfully. The rhythm is perfect and gripping, and the rhyme really adds to the poem. Your diction and imagery are also outstanding; there are a lot of vivid images and words with strong connotations in this piece. There are a few minor mistakes. For example, in the line “You’ll give you’re all to be the first” you should have used ‘your’ not ‘you’re.’ But mistakes are few and far between, and on the whole I think this is an excellent poem. Keep writing!
5/10/2006 c1 168Wylloa
I'm Impressed! I like this, it is both descriptive and realistic. I like how it rhymes only in part of the poem, This makes my Favorites!
5/10/2006 c1 23Helena Evangelist
This is amazing. You told a story in this poem. Very emotional, very true. I can relate. Nice work.

-Miss Helena Black

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