for Tragic Tales of Tragic Toys10/31/2006 c2 
3The Love Love Queen
I envy your writing skills. I really liked it, and I felt bad for the girl; but at the same time, I don't feel bad for her because it's pretty much what she wants.
3The Love Love QueenI envy your writing skills. I really liked it, and I felt bad for the girl; but at the same time, I don't feel bad for her because it's pretty much what she wants.
9/4/2006 c2 4Per Ch4nce
It was just so... sad. Not really what I expected (not in a bad way, though). I was expecting something more like Strawberry Lubricant, though I knew it would be twisted.
It was very good. It reminded me of how great a writer you are. Especially at this sentence: "Quite on the contrary, he was dressed in common-folk clothing (as he referred to it) with a clean shaven face and wash, trimmed hair which still fell upon his shoulders in a choppy fashion." I don't know why.
4Per Ch4nceIt was just so... sad. Not really what I expected (not in a bad way, though). I was expecting something more like Strawberry Lubricant, though I knew it would be twisted.
It was very good. It reminded me of how great a writer you are. Especially at this sentence: "Quite on the contrary, he was dressed in common-folk clothing (as he referred to it) with a clean shaven face and wash, trimmed hair which still fell upon his shoulders in a choppy fashion." I don't know why.
8/3/2006 c2 2miss understanding
You have such unique ideas. I love your writing. ^_~
When he was attaching his mouth to the man's throat, you forgot the apostrophe in "man's"
Heh. Black and white and red all over. That's a rather interesting spin-off on the old joke. Well done. *laughs*
"Lost in my thoughts of this he almost vanished" this seems a bit awkward. You might want to rephrase this.
"He slain before my eyes" should be "slayed" or "had slain"
His lips were sewn together? That's horrible. O_O
"I never paid mine to them" - um, I think this should be "never paid any mind to them"
That's so sad and yet so sweet in a rather twisted way.
Beautiful plot. I love the character's thoughts and feelings. I like how he manages to see kindness in this murderer. It's very . . . noir, maybe?
Just be sure to watch your sentence construct. Update soon!
xchoco
2miss understandingYou have such unique ideas. I love your writing. ^_~
When he was attaching his mouth to the man's throat, you forgot the apostrophe in "man's"
Heh. Black and white and red all over. That's a rather interesting spin-off on the old joke. Well done. *laughs*
"Lost in my thoughts of this he almost vanished" this seems a bit awkward. You might want to rephrase this.
"He slain before my eyes" should be "slayed" or "had slain"
His lips were sewn together? That's horrible. O_O
"I never paid mine to them" - um, I think this should be "never paid any mind to them"
That's so sad and yet so sweet in a rather twisted way.
Beautiful plot. I love the character's thoughts and feelings. I like how he manages to see kindness in this murderer. It's very . . . noir, maybe?
Just be sure to watch your sentence construct. Update soon!
xchoco
5/25/2006 c2 24Limited Edition
Oh oh! I LOVE THIS! KYA
It was a bit hard to get into it, the beginning I mean, it went slow. But I love love love the narrators character. He's so inspiring and beautiful! I can't wait for the real story to be posted. I can't wait for more! I'll kill you if you don't post! Ah well, maybe not kill, but I'll cry!
It was a bit hard to grasp just what Madison was too.
Great job!
(Hohoho I'm putting this to favorites!)
24Limited EditionOh oh! I LOVE THIS! KYA
It was a bit hard to get into it, the beginning I mean, it went slow. But I love love love the narrators character. He's so inspiring and beautiful! I can't wait for the real story to be posted. I can't wait for more! I'll kill you if you don't post! Ah well, maybe not kill, but I'll cry!
It was a bit hard to grasp just what Madison was too.
Great job!
(Hohoho I'm putting this to favorites!)
5/13/2006 c2 1chibi suppi
I liked it... it was cute? Is that a good word for this? lol It's sad how much she loves him yet expected that he couldn't know...
~suppi
1chibi suppiI liked it... it was cute? Is that a good word for this? lol It's sad how much she loves him yet expected that he couldn't know...
~suppi
5/11/2006 c2 10afk
i like you're stories allot because i can always picture the characters, and well in this one it took me a bit the madison and spyder and girl (?) with the swen mouth. but that
10afki like you're stories allot because i can always picture the characters, and well in this one it took me a bit the madison and spyder and girl (?) with the swen mouth. but that
5/10/2006 c2 46Former Kimmi Gray
Ah unrequented love is great isn't it... (not really but it makes a lovely poetic and literary device). I loved this and can't wait for the next one. Bravo!
46Former Kimmi GrayAh unrequented love is great isn't it... (not really but it makes a lovely poetic and literary device). I loved this and can't wait for the next one. Bravo!