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11/23/2005 c1 Guineapiglover-too-lazy-to-sign-in
Great poem. Ditto for what the last person said, but a couple of tips. 1, check your grammar. It's no use rhyming if it doesn't make sense anymore. 2, read it out loud to youself after you've finished writing to see if you've captured the flow.
2/20/2002 c1 Soliloquy Addams
This is honestly the best poem I've read in a year or more. Your rhyme scheme is perfect, and not strained or artificial at all. Your rhythm and syllables in each line have such a natural flow too. And this is THE definition of innocent, especially compared to other writers using fairies in a fetish or in race wars. Finally, the Fey mother's warning about humans' fear spoke to me, and the Church fits in nicely in this poem especially considering its meaning in your other work "Something Better To Do." Au revoir
3/15/2001 c1 Byrn1
Ooooo...I like! Especially the last two lines - all too true...

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