for Docendo Discimus4/20/2008 c1 
4Abel Articulate
I liked this story. It was very well written and I felt that it wasn't as confusing as the other reviewers thought it to be. For one, it seems that the whole theme of the story was not knowing everything that is going on, and I think that's why the author chose to write in this style. You're not getting the whole truth just like the protagonist.
I don't know if you plan on adding to this anytime soon, but it is pretty good. Keep up the good work!
4Abel ArticulateI liked this story. It was very well written and I felt that it wasn't as confusing as the other reviewers thought it to be. For one, it seems that the whole theme of the story was not knowing everything that is going on, and I think that's why the author chose to write in this style. You're not getting the whole truth just like the protagonist.
I don't know if you plan on adding to this anytime soon, but it is pretty good. Keep up the good work!
1/31/2007 c1 11Lirra
very well, written, but confusing in places. check the way you words things, because, remember... we haven't been in your head.
But I do like it ^_^
11Lirravery well, written, but confusing in places. check the way you words things, because, remember... we haven't been in your head.
But I do like it ^_^
5/26/2006 c1 16RuathaWehrling
Greetings! I see that I am apparently on your favorite authors list... but I don't know you! Ah! So I just decided to drop by and read something of yours and say hi. Feel free to drop me a line sometime, if desired. And without further ado...
1.) "These were the ones who had gone straight through teaching and had come flying out through the other side, leaving it gasping in their wake... probably along with sanity, too." - This sentence is rather confusing. How do you fly through "teaching"? Do you mean "teachers' school" or something?
2.) "that was probably why they continued to insist on scraping a rock against a wall despite recent alternatives that may present themselves..." - Do you really need the "that may present themselves..." part? It doesn't seem to add anything and it makes the sentence a little more confusing.
3.) "Despite the fact this man's face was so close to his their noses were nearly touching" - Huh? What does the distance between them have to do with anything? In other words, why the "despite"?
4.) "he couldn’t be the only one who despised these teacher’s meetings" - teachers' (plural possessive)
5.) "Wouldn’t you like to know." - Question mark!
Ok, so first and foremost, I admit that this isn't really my favorite type of writing. I don't deal very well with "comedy" - or rather, those pieces written mainly for comedic effect. So I'm sure you realize that your characters aren't acting in any way like real people (even real students) would, because the entire idea is a farce. *sigh* I really just don't get this whole genre! Why not just write it as if these people were REAL? Sure, make this ridiculous school for teachers, but make the "students" act normal. Anyhow, that's how I'd do it, but like I said, that's mostly because I'm not into this genre.
Beyond that, I'd be interested to see where you're going to take this. With only a prologue-like thing, I don't have much to go on.
Good luck! -Ruatha
16RuathaWehrlingGreetings! I see that I am apparently on your favorite authors list... but I don't know you! Ah! So I just decided to drop by and read something of yours and say hi. Feel free to drop me a line sometime, if desired. And without further ado...
1.) "These were the ones who had gone straight through teaching and had come flying out through the other side, leaving it gasping in their wake... probably along with sanity, too." - This sentence is rather confusing. How do you fly through "teaching"? Do you mean "teachers' school" or something?
2.) "that was probably why they continued to insist on scraping a rock against a wall despite recent alternatives that may present themselves..." - Do you really need the "that may present themselves..." part? It doesn't seem to add anything and it makes the sentence a little more confusing.
3.) "Despite the fact this man's face was so close to his their noses were nearly touching" - Huh? What does the distance between them have to do with anything? In other words, why the "despite"?
4.) "he couldn’t be the only one who despised these teacher’s meetings" - teachers' (plural possessive)
5.) "Wouldn’t you like to know." - Question mark!
Ok, so first and foremost, I admit that this isn't really my favorite type of writing. I don't deal very well with "comedy" - or rather, those pieces written mainly for comedic effect. So I'm sure you realize that your characters aren't acting in any way like real people (even real students) would, because the entire idea is a farce. *sigh* I really just don't get this whole genre! Why not just write it as if these people were REAL? Sure, make this ridiculous school for teachers, but make the "students" act normal. Anyhow, that's how I'd do it, but like I said, that's mostly because I'm not into this genre.
Beyond that, I'd be interested to see where you're going to take this. With only a prologue-like thing, I don't have much to go on.
Good luck! -Ruatha