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7/30/2007 c1 83bittersweet.season
"im so cold"

this yells, really. i know it sounds hokey, but this is gorgeous and it yells more than im so cold.

its like, "this is unfair. stop being stupid. come back before i lose it. please"
12/31/2006 c1 281ThisCut-UpAngel
"and every second I spent with you

was a glimpse of an eternity that only seems real in dreams"

-you have voiced something I never could..please continue writing!
6/28/2006 c1 79Ashes.to.Acid
I apologize for reviewing so late. This is heartbreaking and I'm so sorry that love has done this to you. Believe me, I know how you feel..
6/15/2006 c1 54kaylajac
I don't know you and I don't really know who this poem is for, but it makes me FEEL like I do. You're an amazing writer- I have no idea why I didn't find this awesome poetry before!
6/13/2006 c1 27TMO
nice. we all need a hug sometimes. I liked it where you said, it only happens in dreams. perhaps that's what love is meant to be, for dreams. but no, not real sleeping dreams, mine are too fucked up for that. but come to think of it, I've loved more in a truer sense in my dreams than in this reality.

have you ever heard the song "transatlanticism" by death cab for cutie? this reminded me of it. (damn music is invading our creativity. maybe they should outlaw words in songs. what would it be like if we could only hear instrumentals? would we be smart like in the old days?)

good things,

EiB

(ps, liked your profile.)
6/3/2006 c1 238classic violet
from the first line i was hooked. gorgeous poem, just so beautiful.
5/31/2006 c1 a lonely september
this was such a sweet poem, but so sad at the same time. they're the best kinds of poems, but they make you disappointed in a way, knowing that you're liking something that came out of a person's pain... but this is pretty. it really is, i like it.
5/21/2006 c1 24frayedlifeforce
this is really sad, and i hope things get easier for you.this was well written and i loved the imagery of amber liquid and green glass bottles.
5/19/2006 c1 Atelophobia
Amazing. Just, amazing.
5/19/2006 c1 24she's not breathing
the pain in this is so tangible. "the last grain of sand in our hourglass that became goodbye too soon" is a beautiful closure. my favourite line is "I inhale reality and exhale our dreams" - it's such a marked contrast. very smooth poem; i admire how personal it is.

~kait
5/19/2006 c1 wildwolffree17
Stunning.
5/19/2006 c1 134emeraude-irlandais
We both know that I *love* your poetry, and this is just another example *why*. I love the image of holding hands as an illustration of closeness, then as that fades, so does everything else. I'm so sorry- long distance relationships *are* hard, I know. ^^ But, hey, look on the bright side- you get some good pieces out of it! (deranged writer mode)I think it's wonderful. `~bella~`

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