for My heart is an ashtray8/3/2006 c1 
34Smoky Bear
marvellous haiku! it's captured the essence of what haiku should be (it's suprising how many ppl miss the point of that). not to mention the well chosen, well crafted image. very cool!
34Smoky Bearmarvellous haiku! it's captured the essence of what haiku should be (it's suprising how many ppl miss the point of that). not to mention the well chosen, well crafted image. very cool!
7/29/2006 c1 5Joseph Mises
Hey Max,
This is really good, short, simple, tranverses a good point (I wonder if it's the same as that which you meant?
5Joseph MisesHey Max,
This is really good, short, simple, tranverses a good point (I wonder if it's the same as that which you meant?
6/8/2006 c1 35TeaWithOnions
This is so cool. I've always had this impression about haiku's being more cheery and nature like. This one is very original. Nice job!
35TeaWithOnionsThis is so cool. I've always had this impression about haiku's being more cheery and nature like. This one is very original. Nice job!
6/6/2006 c1 14method acting
I miss you. Write me, please. I've reviewd it before, nice hiaku. The comma use in the first line could be revised, but the meaning is still clear. Really nice.
14method actingI miss you. Write me, please. I've reviewd it before, nice hiaku. The comma use in the first line could be revised, but the meaning is still clear. Really nice.
6/2/2006 c1 106Windup Hopping Lederhosen
I know I reviewed this last time, but I still like it. You should write more haikus!
106Windup Hopping LederhosenI know I reviewed this last time, but I still like it. You should write more haikus!
5/25/2006 c1 27Cait Street
i think i actually reviewed this one already but i'll review anyway. Its awsome!
27Cait Streeti think i actually reviewed this one already but i'll review anyway. Its awsome!
5/24/2006 c1 Oh fuck this
Sorry, Max. At the moment I'm working on a series of haikus, I'm almost done and I'll post them soon, I swear. I think Tam's working on one of his depressing-as-shit stories, but I don't know if he's going to post it. Anndd... I'm pretty sure Owen was writing something, and Mohammed and Charlotte have decided to collaborate on a story. So, there should be some pieces up fairly soon. Sorry for the delay.
This haiku- great job. I've really gotten into haikus lately, first by reading some by The Clarity, (who is also my friend's friend) and then I read a bunch more by a million different authors. Yours is very good, much better than a lot of the ones I've read recently. Good job. Keep writing.
- Chris
Sorry, Max. At the moment I'm working on a series of haikus, I'm almost done and I'll post them soon, I swear. I think Tam's working on one of his depressing-as-shit stories, but I don't know if he's going to post it. Anndd... I'm pretty sure Owen was writing something, and Mohammed and Charlotte have decided to collaborate on a story. So, there should be some pieces up fairly soon. Sorry for the delay.
This haiku- great job. I've really gotten into haikus lately, first by reading some by The Clarity, (who is also my friend's friend) and then I read a bunch more by a million different authors. Yours is very good, much better than a lot of the ones I've read recently. Good job. Keep writing.
- Chris
5/22/2006 c1 42Emmytastic gal
This is awesome. I love the title. So very unique. This emits a lot of raw emotion, and we all know what's to come. Words drip with talent and beauty. Great work.
write on,
-Em
42Emmytastic galThis is awesome. I love the title. So very unique. This emits a lot of raw emotion, and we all know what's to come. Words drip with talent and beauty. Great work.
write on,
-Em
5/21/2006 c1 Little Junkie
I like the harshness of this. Haikus are fun, theres so much you can do with them.
I like the harshness of this. Haikus are fun, theres so much you can do with them.