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10/9/2006 c1 Meg
Awh.That made me cry.No lie.

(Hey that rhymed.)

"The daisy fields,The afternoons in the parks,The candlelit dinners."

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Sad. X(

"You say it’s over,You say you’ll never love again.You say, forget it,You say, I hate you."

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Well written. Very sad. The last line made me start crying.

"How deep those words cut into me,How much they make me cry when your bags are gone."

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Too true.

Awh. Now I'm all sad and criey.This one is by far my favorite dear.It's going on my list and everything.
6/30/2006 c1 Blehk
Just discovered that you revised it...damn...

Well, all the same, but better.

"My castle crumbles" - LOVE the alliteration. Alliteration is my favorite poetic device. I'm a sucker for alliteration.
6/22/2006 c1 61mothersuperiorjumpedthegun
Well, I thought the other version was fine on its own. But this does add a little more to it; a little more imagery and more to reflect back on. Quite well done.
6/7/2006 c1 64Leeona Trance
It's sweet, tho sad.

~Leeona Trance

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