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5/29/2006 c1 19anamellie
you have a very good sense of humor...imagine... swimming in the fountain? hahaha... this made me laugh...

thanks for reviewing ITNT anyway. i'm pleased to know you like it...

-anamellie
5/29/2006 c1 2Lor Decris
Good concept. Good story. A few gramar or typing mistakes here or there, but those are easily fixed.

The one thing I really didn't like was the repetition of their names and titles every time you mentioned them. The alliteration is nice the first time, but it can get kind of tiring, even in a short story like this.

A few revisions and this can be a great story. Keep it up.

- Lor
5/25/2006 c1 57Xerophyte
HA! I like it. This makes me happy.-Andi
5/23/2006 c1 maxnotevoltage
HAHAHA... It's brilliant, brilliant, brilliant! Poor guy... Hilarious concept, though! It somehow reminds me of a certain church lock-in, where a random guy was stood staring longingly into the fishpond. Telepathy? Perhaps... My theory was, he wanted to go swimming.

If only we would've had Officer Pat with us...

Anywho, thanks for the laugh. ::thumbs up::

- J.max

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