for The Merchant's Daughter5/29/2006 c2 
3megamegaturtle
I really like. I can't wait to read the next thing that you will do next!
3megamegaturtleI really like. I can't wait to read the next thing that you will do next!
5/29/2006 c1 1Feaz87
This story is really good and I really like your use of dialouge. A little word of advice: try not to make it TOO 19th Century as far as the dialouge is concerned because people could become bored with it. Trust me, I learned that the hard way earlier on in my fiction writing career.
All in all, good story and I'm looking forward to reading more. Keep it coming.
P.S.
Please read my 9/11 Drama "One Day in September" and review it as well. Thanks.
1Feaz87This story is really good and I really like your use of dialouge. A little word of advice: try not to make it TOO 19th Century as far as the dialouge is concerned because people could become bored with it. Trust me, I learned that the hard way earlier on in my fiction writing career.
All in all, good story and I'm looking forward to reading more. Keep it coming.
P.S.
Please read my 9/11 Drama "One Day in September" and review it as well. Thanks.
5/24/2006 c1 superheroesarereal
hi lovely =) teehee this story is awethum just like you...ahaha umm the only thing is that in the beginning part where it says "minor little crowd", it struck me as unecessary (sp? i HATE this word)and m it seems like you didn't get into the story( if you know what I mean) until halfway through the beginning...i think...maybe...i dunno...i'm hungry and i can't think...well it's good...better than your other stuff i think...except i did like that one on your xanga =) bye
hi lovely =) teehee this story is awethum just like you...ahaha umm the only thing is that in the beginning part where it says "minor little crowd", it struck me as unecessary (sp? i HATE this word)and m it seems like you didn't get into the story( if you know what I mean) until halfway through the beginning...i think...maybe...i dunno...i'm hungry and i can't think...well it's good...better than your other stuff i think...except i did like that one on your xanga =) bye