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9/15/2006 c1 145dfgsfdghftgt44
I apologize, but I really don't understand this. I read it a couple of times, but the sentences are a bit of a jumble. Like

"WHYS pips ignore me OUT"

I don't understand what that's even supposed to say. I think you have ideas, but perhaps have trouble putting them into words. I think all you need is to check your spelling and/or grammar and then your ideas will associate more clearly. You should keep writing, just double check your writing, okay? :D

~Cirien Phoenix

P.S. Thanks for the review on "The Problem With Our Youth." I'm glad you liked it and I definitely will keep going with it even if I end up writing myself in circles.
8/21/2006 c1 tesa131313
to me this was just a bunch of made up phrases stuck together awkwardly. sorry but i didn't understand
5/27/2006 c1 29Mad-4-Manga
Nice!I like it, and it sounds like song lyrics! Awesomeness. ^_~

you need to edit though!EDIT!

"ABSUrd" not "ABSUrb" unless you wanted the word "observe"...

whatever, get a BETA!
5/24/2006 c1 3beinedhiel
The first thing that came into my mind was that my german teacher hasn't given me my grade for the final yet. About the poem... I think it was really quite random and I had no idea what you were talking about. Well actually some parts I do and I can understand it. Maybe if you rapped it.

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