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12/16/2006 c1 36norg
i absolutely love the title of this poem and see it is very fitting i love the line "You look me in the eyes as I die/

And you utter word of fairy tales" it has so much emotion as well as the poem and it really flows through. always love your poetry and cant see whta i can say for improvement, in my opinion i see no room for improvement. you are a very skilled poet and keep it up!
7/31/2006 c1 untilI
Bad grammar, horrible inconsitancy... good concept, but poorly done. In the third line, you're blind folded, and in the 11th he's looking into your eyes. The sheets leave creases in your skin, but you were in the dirt before. Just... I don't know, how about... think. Just think.
5/26/2006 c1 12Sunset Teardrops
Beautiful. Gentle and intense words combined within the lines bring out balance and a dreamy, echoic atmosphere.

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