
12/27/2008 c1
2dragonflydreamer
Ooh, interesting concept. You only started with one word and you managed to expand it into a lovely poem.
I also like the rhythm. It's very clear and helps the poem progress.
[My heart beats slow] slow = slowly
~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

Ooh, interesting concept. You only started with one word and you managed to expand it into a lovely poem.
I also like the rhythm. It's very clear and helps the poem progress.
[My heart beats slow] slow = slowly
~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
5/26/2006 c1
34Nine-Black-Roses
ooh taught me a new word today. :Dthis is a really gd poem and if you think this is ok ur prob gonna be an amazin writer.i can feel this oneits really gdwell done x

ooh taught me a new word today. :Dthis is a really gd poem and if you think this is ok ur prob gonna be an amazin writer.i can feel this oneits really gdwell done x
5/26/2006 c1
31Nurgette
A beautiful poem centred around an intriguing word. Caliginosity-darkness.I can feel the despair of the narrator, outlined by the seeking and loosing. "You're within reach/but so far from me".
My only query is the line "It's all your fault!". It doesn't seem to quite fit the serious tone of the rest of the poem.
Other than that, excellent!

A beautiful poem centred around an intriguing word. Caliginosity-darkness.I can feel the despair of the narrator, outlined by the seeking and loosing. "You're within reach/but so far from me".
My only query is the line "It's all your fault!". It doesn't seem to quite fit the serious tone of the rest of the poem.
Other than that, excellent!