for How Swiftly Innocence Flies7/15/2007 c2 shogi
Powerful. Beautiful. Heartfelt.
I wish you all the best and hope that this stranger's review may make your day (night?) a little brighter. (Corny but I'm sincere ;)
Melisa
Powerful. Beautiful. Heartfelt.
I wish you all the best and hope that this stranger's review may make your day (night?) a little brighter. (Corny but I'm sincere ;)
Melisa
11/28/2006 c1 
3miss-blackhair
ohmigod, i just LOVE how you made the story flow so beuatifully. awesome and brilliantly written. and the meaning of the whole thing just managed to pierce into you. :)
3miss-blackhairohmigod, i just LOVE how you made the story flow so beuatifully. awesome and brilliantly written. and the meaning of the whole thing just managed to pierce into you. :)
10/24/2006 c2 10Rosemarine
Congradulations. That was the most profound thing I have ever read. Ever.
It would be an honor for you to look at my story, Predudice of Species, and showered by your wisdom, for I am a young author and am very eager to recieve instruction from those more experienced than I
10RosemarineCongradulations. That was the most profound thing I have ever read. Ever.
It would be an honor for you to look at my story, Predudice of Species, and showered by your wisdom, for I am a young author and am very eager to recieve instruction from those more experienced than I
8/31/2006 c2 Sasha Distan
That was amazing. I love the differences the the descriptions and the opposition of the birds and the snakes. these are all very good images.
The often references to a high society which is practically extinct really draw me in.
I especially like the sentence "enemies friends in a shifting, changing arena where the silvertongue snake reigns supreme,"
The disjointed s illiteration really proves itself here, the sound of snakes is simply intoxicating.
I very much like this story and I can't decide which chapter I am more attached to. I think the first has slightly more of a concrete image, but the second is, in it's latter stages, truly heart wrenching where as the first is more self pitying.
Well done, an elegant piece.Silvan AE
That was amazing. I love the differences the the descriptions and the opposition of the birds and the snakes. these are all very good images.
The often references to a high society which is practically extinct really draw me in.
I especially like the sentence "enemies friends in a shifting, changing arena where the silvertongue snake reigns supreme,"
The disjointed s illiteration really proves itself here, the sound of snakes is simply intoxicating.
I very much like this story and I can't decide which chapter I am more attached to. I think the first has slightly more of a concrete image, but the second is, in it's latter stages, truly heart wrenching where as the first is more self pitying.
Well done, an elegant piece.Silvan AE
7/12/2006 c1 160bloodtide
I like this alot, you have an excellent style of writing, very unique.
Thank you for your review, and i've made that change from principals to principles, damn my feeble grasp of the english language!
160bloodtideI like this alot, you have an excellent style of writing, very unique.
Thank you for your review, and i've made that change from principals to principles, damn my feeble grasp of the english language!
6/22/2006 c1 Metamorphoze
We spend our time as children wishing to become adults. It isn't until we become adults that we realize everything we've lost.
For some reason, reading this made me want to cry. It's poetic and sad, but it's sad because it is true.
We spend our time as children wishing to become adults. It isn't until we become adults that we realize everything we've lost.
For some reason, reading this made me want to cry. It's poetic and sad, but it's sad because it is true.
6/21/2006 c1 31Leaving Here
thanxs for the help... i really need a beta... and spell check doen't pick up that kind of thing..I may/may not get to fix it.. Its up to my computer..~Liz
31Leaving Herethanxs for the help... i really need a beta... and spell check doen't pick up that kind of thing..I may/may not get to fix it.. Its up to my computer..~Liz
5/29/2006 c1 1T. Com
While I'm not one to read, or comment, on this sort of thing. I must say that was well done and captured many of my own feelings of the sad state of affairs most adults find themselves in.
Some of it was a bit tough to follow but that's probably my own lack of non-fiction experience talking.
And why would somebody flame you for that? If someone chose to that just means they're a self-congratulatory asshole. Or a complete moron who's opinion should count for little in the grand scheme of things.
Or is that my own massive ego talking?
Anyway, good job, and don't let people abuse you without giving at least a little back.
Battle Up.
1T. ComWhile I'm not one to read, or comment, on this sort of thing. I must say that was well done and captured many of my own feelings of the sad state of affairs most adults find themselves in.
Some of it was a bit tough to follow but that's probably my own lack of non-fiction experience talking.
And why would somebody flame you for that? If someone chose to that just means they're a self-congratulatory asshole. Or a complete moron who's opinion should count for little in the grand scheme of things.
Or is that my own massive ego talking?
Anyway, good job, and don't let people abuse you without giving at least a little back.
Battle Up.
5/29/2006 c1 9BlackCat Inc
wow, that was really moving. it really makes you think about what was lost with childhood, other than the super hero pajamas. very good piece of work, i applaud you.
~alainah
9BlackCat Incwow, that was really moving. it really makes you think about what was lost with childhood, other than the super hero pajamas. very good piece of work, i applaud you.
~alainah