for Be Still6/13/2006 c1 
20Once in a blue moon
I love the imagry ("here we are/ close as the air") and also the soothing tone. It reads like a whisper for only one person to hear.
Also, I don't know if you meant this, (I love what I get out of it, so don't tell me if you didn't!) but the line "like a kiss of lovers" made the lovers, rather than the moonlight, seem distant and barely real. Sort of like they're only connected by the moon rather than gazing at it together. Anyway, it plays nicely like that in my mind, so.
nice!
20Once in a blue moonI love the imagry ("here we are/ close as the air") and also the soothing tone. It reads like a whisper for only one person to hear.
Also, I don't know if you meant this, (I love what I get out of it, so don't tell me if you didn't!) but the line "like a kiss of lovers" made the lovers, rather than the moonlight, seem distant and barely real. Sort of like they're only connected by the moon rather than gazing at it together. Anyway, it plays nicely like that in my mind, so.
nice!
6/5/2006 c1 11Autumnymph
Now THIS I can understand.
Uh... They do kinky stuff?
Nvm that! Ahem, what can I say about ze poem? I still cant feel for it O_O
Gosh, I think i'm still sleepy... Maybe that's why I am void of emotions now... Maybe I'll read it again next time and finally realise how full of emotions it is, who knows. Maybe.
11AutumnymphNow THIS I can understand.
Uh... They do kinky stuff?
Nvm that! Ahem, what can I say about ze poem? I still cant feel for it O_O
Gosh, I think i'm still sleepy... Maybe that's why I am void of emotions now... Maybe I'll read it again next time and finally realise how full of emotions it is, who knows. Maybe.
6/5/2006 c1 fayreweill
Hmm.. I like. (: It's got a rather dreamlike, peaceful feel to it, lovely and simple.
Hmm.. I like. (: It's got a rather dreamlike, peaceful feel to it, lovely and simple.
6/1/2006 c1 30Drizit
Wow. Short sentences but great emotions. How the hell do you write all these poems? Makes me feel really lame with mine...
30DrizitWow. Short sentences but great emotions. How the hell do you write all these poems? Makes me feel really lame with mine...
5/29/2006 c1 51Katue Edmund
Beautiful poem! It creates such an atmosphere and really communicates a surprising amount of emotions, concidering its size. Phrasing and language is great, and the idea itself is just very nice. Loved it
51Katue EdmundBeautiful poem! It creates such an atmosphere and really communicates a surprising amount of emotions, concidering its size. Phrasing and language is great, and the idea itself is just very nice. Loved it