for Classy and Fabulous5/10/2009 c2 
1Jaelyn Disraeli
You've got the makings of a good story here. I like the premise. I like that she's spoiled. But I think you should make her a little more sympathetic. Add a nice trait please? But it's your story, so this is just my opinion.
1Jaelyn DisraeliYou've got the makings of a good story here. I like the premise. I like that she's spoiled. But I think you should make her a little more sympathetic. Add a nice trait please? But it's your story, so this is just my opinion.
6/15/2008 c2 10C.M.F Wright
I liked this. I liked the contrast between city and country life. Brianna's characterization was really good. I loved the humor, particularly "She hadn’t been so upset since Twinkle tinkled on her teddy bear, Mrs. Muffin, in fifth grade." Nice!
10C.M.F WrightI liked this. I liked the contrast between city and country life. Brianna's characterization was really good. I loved the humor, particularly "She hadn’t been so upset since Twinkle tinkled on her teddy bear, Mrs. Muffin, in fifth grade." Nice!
1/31/2007 c2 CHIIJOY
i love-love this story. i can relate. i go nowhere without the essentials. one time i lost my lipgloss and almost died of lipchap! they don't say in commerials that it hurts. anywho HEHE, eric seems cool even with his snap judgements. update soon.
i love-love this story. i can relate. i go nowhere without the essentials. one time i lost my lipgloss and almost died of lipchap! they don't say in commerials that it hurts. anywho HEHE, eric seems cool even with his snap judgements. update soon.
12/23/2006 c1 3Da Vinci at Work
Haha. Nice chapter. There aren't many third person's on fictionpress.
3Da Vinci at WorkHaha. Nice chapter. There aren't many third person's on fictionpress.
11/19/2006 c2 akb-inactive
I actullay haven't read a lot about a rich girl moving to a rural area.. dunno, I haven't really found a lot of them. Haha, but I liked this one. I like her sense of sarcasm and how she's not sissy like (wow.. I used the word sissy...) update soon! :D
I actullay haven't read a lot about a rich girl moving to a rural area.. dunno, I haven't really found a lot of them. Haha, but I liked this one. I like her sense of sarcasm and how she's not sissy like (wow.. I used the word sissy...) update soon! :D
10/8/2006 c2 3n-who-says
can you say FABOLOUS STORY?
cause seriously yours rock.
and yea, probably wont get a story out till christmas. i asked my mentor and she told me that i shall have to expect a booked fall semester for my all of my high school years. BUT spring semsester we have about 2 weeks off and we get out early on top of other breaks. crazily cool. so...ill try to make up on updates during spring break.
have fun writing your story and keep it up. i cant wait to see where this goes!
3n-who-sayscan you say FABOLOUS STORY?
cause seriously yours rock.
and yea, probably wont get a story out till christmas. i asked my mentor and she told me that i shall have to expect a booked fall semester for my all of my high school years. BUT spring semsester we have about 2 weeks off and we get out early on top of other breaks. crazily cool. so...ill try to make up on updates during spring break.
have fun writing your story and keep it up. i cant wait to see where this goes!
10/3/2006 c2 7miyuuri
I know you're probably not updating anymore *tear* but i just wanted to beg you to update! i love your story s far. I can so relate to Brianna, maybe not as extreme but I have used perfume to cover other not so savoury smells =P please update sooN!
7miyuuriI know you're probably not updating anymore *tear* but i just wanted to beg you to update! i love your story s far. I can so relate to Brianna, maybe not as extreme but I have used perfume to cover other not so savoury smells =P please update sooN!
9/22/2006 c2 17angels and effects
I've read quite a number of stories about girl from chic city moving to rural countryside, but this one... well, it's really interesting! The way you describe how Brianna doesn't like the 'stink' of farms and how she sprays perfume to get rid of it - shows her metropolitian personality just right :) I laughed at the 'Twinkle tinkled' part, it's so FUNNY! LOL, especially considering not many people use 'tinkle' nowadays. Great use of words :D Wearing sunglasses indoors IS a little weird, but hey, I see Brendan! LOVE THAT NAME =D Eric ain't that bad too... Just something I noticed, it isn't spelled 'isle', it's 'aisle'. Yup.
Is she going to school in Pennsylvania too? Yeah, I'd think so. Meeting Brendon there will be a blast XD so update soon! Great so far :)
17angels and effectsI've read quite a number of stories about girl from chic city moving to rural countryside, but this one... well, it's really interesting! The way you describe how Brianna doesn't like the 'stink' of farms and how she sprays perfume to get rid of it - shows her metropolitian personality just right :) I laughed at the 'Twinkle tinkled' part, it's so FUNNY! LOL, especially considering not many people use 'tinkle' nowadays. Great use of words :D Wearing sunglasses indoors IS a little weird, but hey, I see Brendan! LOVE THAT NAME =D Eric ain't that bad too... Just something I noticed, it isn't spelled 'isle', it's 'aisle'. Yup.
Is she going to school in Pennsylvania too? Yeah, I'd think so. Meeting Brendon there will be a blast XD so update soon! Great so far :)
8/20/2006 c2 9Sally Can Wait
xD I like this. Keep going with it.
(By the way, yes, I wrote the lyrics. I sort of had to, in order to not infringe any copyright laws, etc. I've never actually written lyrics before, but whatever.)
-Sally Can Wait
9Sally Can WaitxD I like this. Keep going with it.
(By the way, yes, I wrote the lyrics. I sort of had to, in order to not infringe any copyright laws, etc. I've never actually written lyrics before, but whatever.)
-Sally Can Wait
6/23/2006 c2 3Not Who I Look Like
Tis very good! I really like it! Update soon! I'll be waiting!
PS Thanks for reviewing my story!
3Not Who I Look LikeTis very good! I really like it! Update soon! I'll be waiting!
PS Thanks for reviewing my story!
6/2/2006 c2 5JaneBarrie
Hey, good story. I can't really relate to the girl, but very original nonetheless!
-J.B.
5JaneBarrieHey, good story. I can't really relate to the girl, but very original nonetheless!
-J.B.
6/2/2006 c2 Isobel Evans
nice chapter! i can totally relate! I mean, so what if she's spoiled! Urgh. I totally hate people like Brandon. but, since he good looking, he might pass. hahaha. I have to say, I'm not much of an rural girl too. I dont like hiking...farms...animals... And people totally judge me like that!
Anyways, nice chapter! Keep going!
nice chapter! i can totally relate! I mean, so what if she's spoiled! Urgh. I totally hate people like Brandon. but, since he good looking, he might pass. hahaha. I have to say, I'm not much of an rural girl too. I dont like hiking...farms...animals... And people totally judge me like that!
Anyways, nice chapter! Keep going!
6/2/2006 c2 Slander By Osmosis
It sounds like a cute story so far. I like it. May I suggest adding a bit more detail to your descriptions? What makes Brendan so attractive? Or something like that. I don't know; I'm not very good with constructive critique. ^_^ Update soon please!
- Lithely
It sounds like a cute story so far. I like it. May I suggest adding a bit more detail to your descriptions? What makes Brendan so attractive? Or something like that. I don't know; I'm not very good with constructive critique. ^_^ Update soon please!
- Lithely