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1/4/2009 c1 7facingdemons
The last line was the line that just made the whole piece of exquisite writing all the more compelling.
11/29/2007 c1 67Helpless-Dreamer01
Ok, my lovely. About revenge, or a love that has a revenge in seek of parley.. (also prob doesn't help that i've drank so much either lol) I like it though, confusing, yet... refreshing. BRAVA!

9/17/2006 c1 80citrus scented
i think this would read better in stanza format, but then again having said that this gives the effect of writing on a note. the kind you find, with no title or anything.

I like this. I think I get what you're trying to say, that you've been trying to put your situation/feeling about someone into a poem...but they're so 3d they're hard to compress into words. well yeah I can relate to that.

its good, its sweet, unique and just...works well.
7/14/2006 c1 6Nobody-n-Particular
Interesting bunch of words, I like.
6/17/2006 c1 871no.peace.los.angeles
Wow, amazing work. I love some of the phrases in here: "broken boy promises," "self pity on dirty white phone cords." I love that last line. So perfect. Keep writing! :)
6/4/2006 c1 Martin Peterson
You're such a wonderfully fresh writer! Love the first sentance, which almost produces an image of fake, imagined, perhaps fantastical love. As for the last line... perfectly illustrates your way with words!

6/2/2006 c1 194Aslan Israel

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