for Hell's Angel7/1/2013 c6 An Imaginative Mind
This story has a greal deal of potential. If you could try to expand it from 24k into about 35k you could add more details and create a better version of this story. The idea is great just the execution needs work. It was a pleasure to read your story here. :)
This story has a greal deal of potential. If you could try to expand it from 24k into about 35k you could add more details and create a better version of this story. The idea is great just the execution needs work. It was a pleasure to read your story here. :)
9/3/2012 c6 Guest
I love your story!so adorable! XD
I love your story!so adorable! XD
2/14/2009 c2 
2Poyo
I read your A/N, but was unable to open the link supplied for the rewritten version of your story. So, I decided to read this version.
It has an extreme amount of potential, and I like it more because I'm not reading about Vampires/Werewolves. It's nice to read about other supernatural beings. And, although my own story contains the latter, it's centered more around a Fallen Angel.
Our Fallens are different, and that's interesting. I like Aidyn, but I so far don't care too much for Rae. She's impulsive, though if she weren't we might not have gotten this far in your tale.
I'll agree with you on the rewriting, as your chapter did contain a lot of 'holes' that would be nicer if filled in. Other than being a little thin on descriptions, I really like the concept of your story.
I will continue to read it. Good job!
2PoyoI read your A/N, but was unable to open the link supplied for the rewritten version of your story. So, I decided to read this version.
It has an extreme amount of potential, and I like it more because I'm not reading about Vampires/Werewolves. It's nice to read about other supernatural beings. And, although my own story contains the latter, it's centered more around a Fallen Angel.
Our Fallens are different, and that's interesting. I like Aidyn, but I so far don't care too much for Rae. She's impulsive, though if she weren't we might not have gotten this far in your tale.
I'll agree with you on the rewriting, as your chapter did contain a lot of 'holes' that would be nicer if filled in. Other than being a little thin on descriptions, I really like the concept of your story.
I will continue to read it. Good job!
6/7/2008 c6 6naningxoxo
Wow... your story is pretty good and I really mean it. Although I thought that your story was a bit short at times and it was missing something, it was still hell of a lot better than most fictionpress stories that I've read. I enjoyed reading your vocabulary, the character's growth and behavior, and your plot. Awesome job and I hope to read more of your stories soon.
6naningxoxoWow... your story is pretty good and I really mean it. Although I thought that your story was a bit short at times and it was missing something, it was still hell of a lot better than most fictionpress stories that I've read. I enjoyed reading your vocabulary, the character's growth and behavior, and your plot. Awesome job and I hope to read more of your stories soon.
11/23/2007 c1 white raven 41
I just read through your story.
And I have to agree with all the other reviewers - its realy good.
But some critisism from me: You first chapters were much better then the later ones. The characters develop some strange behavior, like when Raelyn was so depresse she couldnt remember Isaak, althoug the picture of Aidyn shielding her with his wings was beautyfull :)
The later chapters seemed, like you have done them in a hurry just to get finished.
I realy enjoyed reading it, keep on writing!
I just read through your story.
And I have to agree with all the other reviewers - its realy good.
But some critisism from me: You first chapters were much better then the later ones. The characters develop some strange behavior, like when Raelyn was so depresse she couldnt remember Isaak, althoug the picture of Aidyn shielding her with his wings was beautyfull :)
The later chapters seemed, like you have done them in a hurry just to get finished.
I realy enjoyed reading it, keep on writing!
8/3/2006 c4 11Crimson Ara
It was a good story. It ended different that I exspected it too, but it was good.
-Crimson Ara
11Crimson AraIt was a good story. It ended different that I exspected it too, but it was good.
-Crimson Ara
7/17/2006 c3 1Odi et amo
I just made a joyful squeeking sound... So I suppose that means this chapter was utterly fantastic, therefore leading me to conclude that you should update! *nods*
I love this story!
1Odi et amoI just made a joyful squeeking sound... So I suppose that means this chapter was utterly fantastic, therefore leading me to conclude that you should update! *nods*
I love this story!