
6/4/2006 c1
10The Dude Abides
Really good stuff! however, i couldn't feel all that sorry for the Andrea and her father. Sure, what happened was horrible, but i don't even know her father's name! who is the masked man? why did he kill Andrea? DID he kill Andrea, or is he just a goon? nevertheless, you use wonderful imagery and are one of the better writers on this site (not a whole lot of people can get a story JUST right) perhaps you can do a backstory to this. if so, i can't wait!

Really good stuff! however, i couldn't feel all that sorry for the Andrea and her father. Sure, what happened was horrible, but i don't even know her father's name! who is the masked man? why did he kill Andrea? DID he kill Andrea, or is he just a goon? nevertheless, you use wonderful imagery and are one of the better writers on this site (not a whole lot of people can get a story JUST right) perhaps you can do a backstory to this. if so, i can't wait!