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5/1/2009 c1 65white to gray
I like this, but I think it would be more powerful without the italics. The rhyming between all three words is visible without drawing attention to them.

Constructive critique only, no harm meant. :) I have to add that the image of stretched leather is great and raw.
8/1/2006 c1 11hippos-anoonymus
your poem was amazing and really deep,bravo
7/12/2006 c1 toxic-nooodle725
loved tha last line. kudos!
6/8/2006 c1 11les petits bateaux
oh my. this is GORGEOUS! i mean, the intesity in this is so thick. :D

-trinity
6/4/2006 c1 116searchlight
I think you meant 'accept' in the summary, not 'except'. Just a little constructive criticism.

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