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8/2/2007 c1 Tytherpol
i love this one. :)
8/22/2006 c1 1Mosaic Stains
Well! This poem though short carries a sort of potent meaning to it. Especially the last part: Your words like cheap champagne. Leave a bitter taste in my mouth.

It leaves me wondering what exactly you meant by those words.
7/4/2006 c1 8bemused scribbler
wow, i really like this. is short but i think if it was longer it wouldnt say as much...i know that sounds odd, but maybe you get what i mean...
6/27/2006 c1 11Veronica Keeler
i liked your usage of, as my old teacher called them, "big words"
6/21/2006 c1 26Michael Kim
You have certainly not failed in getting across the emotion which is the core to this piece, yet the incompleteness of sentences and the imperfection of structure seem to hinder me from getting the most out of it. Unless, of course, it was your purpose to deliberately make this poem as it reads now.
6/20/2006 c1 35Autumn Reflections
wow, this is awesome! keep writing!

Kyonkichi^^
6/10/2006 c1 3Leo Eigenmann
This poem may be short but it has a certain directness that I like about it and you can really feel its impact once you read it. Nice one.

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