for Door Number 311/27/2006 c3 
1KrisEleven
Ok. I like this story, its a little creepy, but it has a good story going. You changed POV in the third chapter, though which was weird. You should have stuck with third person.
"I have a mother remember?” That was really wierd, too.
1KrisElevenOk. I like this story, its a little creepy, but it has a good story going. You changed POV in the third chapter, though which was weird. You should have stuck with third person.
"I have a mother remember?” That was really wierd, too.
6/11/2006 c1 36MoonLitDemon
Interesting idea. Polytheistic, which is always fun. Vaguely reminds me a bit of The Omen, even though she didn't acutally have the baby and whatnot. Good start. Some awkward sentence structure with multiple antecedents, but I do it all the time, so I'm not one to nitpick on things that make me look hypocritical.
Happy HuntingMOONLITDEMON
36MoonLitDemonInteresting idea. Polytheistic, which is always fun. Vaguely reminds me a bit of The Omen, even though she didn't acutally have the baby and whatnot. Good start. Some awkward sentence structure with multiple antecedents, but I do it all the time, so I'm not one to nitpick on things that make me look hypocritical.
Happy HuntingMOONLITDEMON