for Cure Me6/5/2007 c1 a lonely september
i love the repetition of 'please cure me' it's wonderful. really hits home, this poem. 'drink up, thirsty, from the well of youth' 'the pain inspires you'. & i love the first few lines. wonderful. :)
i love the repetition of 'please cure me' it's wonderful. really hits home, this poem. 'drink up, thirsty, from the well of youth' 'the pain inspires you'. & i love the first few lines. wonderful. :)
7/12/2006 c1 
18ShadesofBlue69
I really like the line "street lights...me waiting for you" but thats about it. this doesn't make enough sense.the idea that pain inspires you doesn't fit w/ the one of "please cure me" or at least your not showing how it fits, your not really showing the reader the connection.I'm kinda lost on the emotion behind this...it doesn't quite flow/make sense.
18ShadesofBlue69I really like the line "street lights...me waiting for you" but thats about it. this doesn't make enough sense.the idea that pain inspires you doesn't fit w/ the one of "please cure me" or at least your not showing how it fits, your not really showing the reader the connection.I'm kinda lost on the emotion behind this...it doesn't quite flow/make sense.
6/13/2006 c1 56jenifer ayrs
nice language :) especially like the 'inside out with glee' part; imaginative :)
56jenifer ayrsnice language :) especially like the 'inside out with glee' part; imaginative :)